| Oh man, where to begin...?
1. You're right, the intro did suck, but you didn't need to say it yourself in the comic. To most readers, that just screams "Look at me, I'm humble!", which definitely isn't humble, and therefore shouldn't be done. Confused yet?
2. Those sprites really do look like crap compared with the backgrounds, especially Kefka and Pete. Did you resize by hand? For shame.
3. Cheap scribble blood = NO. Blood entirely covering Wayman's beak and feet = cheap = no. Give a little more effort into it; hell, I don't even think it's needed.
4. I can tell you were aiming for humor. I can also tell that you failed. Work on that. That's all I can say.
5. The text was all fine and dandy until the pawn shop. Then, it was nearly impossible to read. I recommend speech bubbles or boxes or whatever tickles your fancy.
I look forward to seeing improvements.
~Dylan |