Well, the double posting effect was superb
. The fact that we can't even make out what was going on also was cool.
Seriously, though, that looks more like an abstract comix than a real thing. Organize your frames to make it look like something is happening. If you use clear backgrounds, textboxes are unnecessary, especially if they are messy. If you email me, I can get you some good, ready made ones which you can size yourself. Also, make the text more legible. I have no idea what you're doing. You keep changing frame sizes, and text sizes. This is a fault I have (at least with frames), but that is just a mess. Lastly, put some original jokes in. They don't have to be funny, but they have to be GOOD. Those jokes aren't that good. Good luck! -CSM