| That one could've been much much better.
1) The title just looked terrible, and hand-drawn and such. There's nothing wrong with just plain text.
2) Uneven panels; it just looks like shoddy worksmanship.
3) It was hard to find the text bubbles themselves; try making them black.
4) Detailed ground would be nice. Same for that pillar.
Again, very novel idea. I like how you're able to relate video games to something as boring as math (No offense.). Not as good as the Yoshi's Island one, but still not bad. Just work on those few problems.
~Dylan |