| Wait one winute. You may have good intentions, but please work on a few things first.
You seem to be having trouble making text fit, therefore make your panels bigger.
Second your explosions are a bit blah (yes, Luigi's fireball looks fine). There are games and resources that will have these as sprites for you, just do not go overboard with them.
Third, please run everything through a spell checker first, better yet, sketch a storyboard freehand and make a script in Word.
I may not be a definative source, but these things should help you out a bit. |