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ZIPPYDIPPY19 · 08-30-2004, 07:58 PM

The last chapter was good, and I found only several mistakes, but try to combine sentences so they flow better. Too many periods occasionally make it choppy to read.

08-30-2004, 07:58 PM	#14
ZIPPYDIPPY19 Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: Ohio Posts: 2,663 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Points: 3,497.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 3,997.00 Donate	The last chapter was good, and I found only several mistakes, but try to combine sentences so they flow better. Too many periods occasionally make it choppy to read.