My Super Mario Comics!

Geno Star · 12-19-2004, 12:35 AM

Comic 1

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Comic 2

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Comic 3

I'll update tomorrow... I have a game to continue making... Mario Bros. Game! Anyway... I have 15 comics already... Just didn't post them here.

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Comic 4

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Comic 5

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Comic 6

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Comic 7

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Comic 8

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Comic 9

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Comic 10

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Comic 11

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Comic 12

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Comic 13

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Comic 14

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Comic 15

Credit to the Shyguy Kingdom for the sprites!

[ December 18, 2004, 11:38 PM: Message edited by: Geno Star ]

Superyoshi · 12-19-2004, 12:45 AM

OK, I'm guessing these are your firsts. They're basically normal for someone's first. Here's some constructive criticism for you. A background would help greatly, I don't get Comic #1's joke at all. #2's joke is way overused, it's beocmming old. #3 is allright. Also THANK YOU for not saving them as JPGs! I give you a 6/10. Not great, not bad.

Beam Yosho the Drunkard · 12-19-2004, 12:53 AM

Zzz...

sladd54 · 12-19-2004, 10:10 AM

I agree with Beam.

thunt · 12-19-2004, 10:13 AM

Basically what SuperYoshi said. It might help if you got rid of all the extra space on top.
Rating:

X-3 · 12-19-2004, 10:17 AM

They're good. Give it a background and it proporly will be better.

A Genius · 12-19-2004, 12:10 PM

They're allright. The only big thing here is to improve your writing/humor.

-A Genius (Destroy all humane.)

thunt · 12-19-2004, 03:05 PM

Also, make the text bold. It will be MUCH easier to read.

12-19-2004, 12:35 AM	#1
Geno Star Newbie Join Date: Dec 2004 Posts: 1 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 670.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 1,170.00 Donate	Comic 1 ___________________________ Comic 2 ____________________________ Comic 3 I'll update tomorrow... I have a game to continue making... Mario Bros. Game! Anyway... I have 15 comics already... Just didn't post them here. __________________________ Comic 4 ___________________________ Comic 5 ___________________________ Comic 6 _____________________ Comic 7 _____________________ Comic 8 _____________________ Comic 9 _____________________ Comic 10 _____________________ Comic 11 _____________________ Comic 12 _____________________ Comic 13 _____________________ Comic 14 _____________________ Comic 15 Credit to the Shyguy Kingdom for the sprites! [ December 18, 2004, 11:38 PM: Message edited by: Geno Star ]

12-19-2004, 12:45 AM	#2
Superyoshi Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: Pennsylvania Posts: 486 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 5,006.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 5,506.00 Donate	OK, I'm guessing these are your firsts. They're basically normal for someone's first. Here's some constructive criticism for you. A background would help greatly, I don't get Comic #1's joke at all. #2's joke is way overused, it's beocmming old. #3 is allright. Also THANK YOU for not saving them as JPGs! I give you a 6/10. Not great, not bad.

12-19-2004, 12:53 AM	#3
Beam Yosho the Drunkard Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: The oversized rock of Hawaii. Gender: Posts: 5,664 Thanks: 5 Thanked 17 Times in 13 Posts Points: 23,943.39 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 24,443.39 Donate	Zzz...

12-19-2004, 10:10 AM	#4
sladd54 Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: my parent\'s basement, right next to the cheers dartboard Posts: 355 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,228.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 4,728.00 Donate	I agree with Beam.

12-19-2004, 10:13 AM	#5
thunt Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: MY MOTHER WAS A SAINT!!! :punch: Gender: Posts: 1,117 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,604.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 5,104.00 Donate	Basically what SuperYoshi said. It might help if you got rid of all the extra space on top. Rating:

12-19-2004, 10:17 AM	#6
X-3 Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Brigade HQ Gender: Posts: 9,655 Thanks: 342 Thanked 395 Times in 287 Posts Blog Entries: 5 Points: 23,851.49 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 23,851.49 Donate	They're good. Give it a background and it proporly will be better.

12-19-2004, 12:10 PM	#7
A Genius Senior Member Join Date: May 2001 Location: Place Posts: 2,657 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 3,177.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 3,677.00 Donate	They're allright. The only big thing here is to improve your writing/humor. -A Genius (Destroy all humane.)

12-19-2004, 03:05 PM	#8
thunt Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: MY MOTHER WAS A SAINT!!! :punch: Gender: Posts: 1,117 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,604.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 5,104.00 Donate	Also, make the text bold. It will be MUCH easier to read.