My comix

Gaara · 12-28-2004, 04:03 PM

This is my first comix series. This first part is kinda slow, but it'll get better, I promise. (And yes, X is going to be stupid)
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Please feel free to insult me.

[ January 03, 2005, 03:55 PM: Message edited by: Astroman ]

RMC · 12-28-2004, 04:54 PM

okay many things wrong with this.

-The sprites dont touch the ground
-You mixed sprites *big no no*
-And I really didnt get the joke

Fix those and think of a more funny joke and I think this comic could be a decent comic.

Codiekitty · 12-28-2004, 05:07 PM

Your font colors on the backgrounds hurt me...

Actually, the whole thing hurts me...

Where are these lemmings going? The Super Nintendo Super Shire! Hop in line and follow them there!

Auron · 12-28-2004, 09:18 PM

It could use a little work. Ok, mabye I lied. It could use a lot of work. But it's your first comic. The first one is always a learning experience.

thunt · 12-29-2004, 12:38 PM

Not too bad. You could use some backrounds, and maybe youshould try some better colors. But I don't see anything wrong with putting Donez in there. Even if he is mixing sprites, it doesn't really show. And what was that white thing in the corner?
Rating:

And because every thread needs one:

Fortune: Teh Mystic Fish says “Fortune cookies? Psssssssh. Teh Mystic Fish you should listen to. I mean, come on! Those things are completely random! Not like me!” :hides hat with fortunes in it:

Gaara · 12-29-2004, 01:56 PM

Explanation for the white thing: My computer stinks.

Codiekitty: I always thought your comix were the best.

Anyway, part 2 is coming soon. (Poor Sting Chameleon. Nobody likes him....)

Gaara · 12-29-2004, 02:27 PM

Well, I finished sooner than I thought. And the reason why the ground kept moving will be explained later.

Fun fact(s):
-Originally, I was going to have the ground impale Spark Mandrill.
-The "A winner is you!" line is from a badly translated game.
-I was going to have Baby Mario fall on Sting Chameleon's back and he would go on an adventure. But I think the killing spree is cooler.

Here it is!
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(click the link)

thunt · 12-29-2004, 03:09 PM

Meh. Not so good. Bad effects and edits, a badly resized rock, and the frames are badly orientated. I can sum this comic up in one word(no hard feelings): bad.

And Ooh! A 16-bit Doma!

^^ How does the fact that your computer stinks make for a white squiggle? It makes no sense. None. At all. Really. Kinda. Well... it still doesn't make sense.

[ December 29, 2004, 02:46 PM: Message edited by: Tigt ]

Gaara · 12-29-2004, 03:42 PM

I was originally going to have Leo and Trinity, etc. but I didn't want it to be THAT obvious that it's supposed to be Doma.

Gaara · 12-30-2004, 12:40 PM

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GO STING CHAMELEON!

thunt · 12-30-2004, 12:44 PM

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!! Run for your lives! Eye-hurting backrounds, poorly done violence, hard-to-read text, and it confusing! Run!!!!

So, um, yeah. But also make better text bubbles and don't try to make a house using game items and then drawing a crappy outline.

[Psst! Astroman! For your sig, weirdo is spelled with the e before the i.]

[ December 30, 2004, 04:41 PM: Message edited by: Tigt ]

RMC · 12-30-2004, 01:57 PM

Dude you have to much space on it it has bad backgrounds and the gore is bad. Really really bad. and why is Flame Mammoth just frozen there?

sladd54 · 12-30-2004, 08:48 PM

That chameleon copter just scares me...and brings up a point!

what the hell does Bowser have a clown copter? Is't he a dragon turtle thing?

thunt · 12-30-2004, 10:14 PM

He bought it on ebay for 28 cents.

Beam Yosho the Drunkard · 12-30-2004, 10:58 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Shadow Sean:
what the hell does Bowser have a clown copter? Is't he a dragon turtle thing?

Play Super Mario World for SNES, bub. And beat it. You'll see Bowser in that very....thing.

Gaara · 12-31-2004, 11:02 PM

Sick of FMtS. Here's my new series where I make fun of cliche murder shows with the infamous "person finding a dead body" beginning. This is part 1: "Murdered Milde"

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thunt · 01-01-2005, 10:56 AM

Not very good. There was a lot of extra space, the props were pretty bad, and I have no idea why everyone else died when they found Milde dead.

sladd54 · 01-01-2005, 02:51 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Beam Yosho the Drunkard:
</font><blockquote>quote:</font><hr />Originally posted by Shadow Sean:
what the hell does Bowser have a clown copter? Is't he a dragon turtle thing?

Play Super Mario World for SNES, bub. And beat it. You'll see Bowser in that very....thing. </font>[/quote]Yeah, I know that, anyone who plays super mario should know that. but WHY does he have one?

Gaara · 01-01-2005, 07:27 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Tigt:
Not very good. There was a lot of extra space, the props were pretty bad, and I have no idea why everyone else died when they found Milde dead.

Because the killer is quick and sneaky. And because they didn't water the cactus.
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[ January 01, 2005, 06:59 PM: Message edited by: Astroman ]

A Genius · 01-02-2005, 11:19 AM

That was an improvement over the last one. Still, you've got a lot of wasted space and the jokes could be played out better. Also, what was up with Lakitu at the end?

-A Genius (A hose way no.)

12-28-2004, 04:03 PM	#1
Gaara Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Megaman 8 Posts: 53 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 1,236.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 1,736.00 Donate	This is my first comix series. This first part is kinda slow, but it'll get better, I promise. (And yes, X is going to be stupid) <a href="http://www.imagehosting.us.com/showimage.php?id=10360&h=239235" target="_blank"> </a> Please feel free to insult me. [ January 03, 2005, 03:55 PM: Message edited by: Astroman ]

12-28-2004, 04:54 PM	#2
RMC Member Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: Phoenix, NY Posts: 1,129 Thanks: 1 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Points: 10,538.05 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 11,038.05 Donate	okay many things wrong with this. -The sprites dont touch the ground -You mixed sprites big no no -And I really didnt get the joke Fix those and think of a more funny joke and I think this comic could be a decent comic.

12-28-2004, 05:07 PM	#3
Codiekitty Just Another Face in Red Jumpsuit Join Date: May 2001 Location: Lemmingland Gender: Posts: 19,143 Thanks: 121 Thanked 174 Times in 120 Posts Points: 48,935.72 Bank: 3,021,450.74 Total Points: 3,070,386.46 Donate	Your font colors on the backgrounds hurt me... Actually, the whole thing hurts me... Where are these lemmings going? The Super Nintendo Super Shire! Hop in line and follow them there!

12-28-2004, 09:18 PM	#4
Auron Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: I don't know. Where do I live? Gender: Posts: 5,783 Thanks: 7 Thanked 195 Times in 124 Posts Points: 1,773.56 Bank: 368,315.67 Total Points: 370,089.23 Donate	It could use a little work. Ok, mabye I lied. It could use a lot of work. But it's your first comic. The first one is always a learning experience.

12-29-2004, 12:38 PM	#5
thunt Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: MY MOTHER WAS A SAINT!!! :punch: Gender: Posts: 1,117 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,593.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 5,093.00 Donate	Not too bad. You could use some backrounds, and maybe youshould try some better colors. But I don't see anything wrong with putting Donez in there. Even if he is mixing sprites, it doesn't really show. And what was that white thing in the corner? Rating: And because every thread needs one: Fortune: Teh Mystic Fish says “Fortune cookies? Psssssssh. Teh Mystic Fish you should listen to. I mean, come on! Those things are completely random! Not like me!” :hides hat with fortunes in it:

12-29-2004, 01:56 PM	#6
Gaara Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Megaman 8 Posts: 53 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 1,236.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 1,736.00 Donate	Explanation for the white thing: My computer stinks. Codiekitty: I always thought your comix were the best. Anyway, part 2 is coming soon. (Poor Sting Chameleon. Nobody likes him....)

12-29-2004, 02:27 PM	#7
Gaara Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Megaman 8 Posts: 53 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 1,236.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 1,736.00 Donate	Well, I finished sooner than I thought. And the reason why the ground kept moving will be explained later. Fun fact(s): -Originally, I was going to have the ground impale Spark Mandrill. -The "A winner is you!" line is from a badly translated game. -I was going to have Baby Mario fall on Sting Chameleon's back and he would go on an adventure. But I think the killing spree is cooler. Here it is! <a href="http://www.imagehosting.us.com/showimage.php?id=10805&h=999506" target="_blank"> </a> (click the link)

12-29-2004, 03:09 PM	#8
thunt Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: MY MOTHER WAS A SAINT!!! :punch: Gender: Posts: 1,117 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,593.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 5,093.00 Donate	Meh. Not so good. Bad effects and edits, a badly resized rock, and the frames are badly orientated. I can sum this comic up in one word(no hard feelings): bad. And Ooh! A 16-bit Doma! ^^ How does the fact that your computer stinks make for a white squiggle? It makes no sense. None. At all. Really. Kinda. Well... it still doesn't make sense. [ December 29, 2004, 02:46 PM: Message edited by: Tigt ]

12-29-2004, 03:42 PM	#9
Gaara Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Megaman 8 Posts: 53 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 1,236.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 1,736.00 Donate	I was originally going to have Leo and Trinity, etc. but I didn't want it to be THAT obvious that it's supposed to be Doma.

12-30-2004, 12:40 PM	#10
Gaara Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Megaman 8 Posts: 53 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 1,236.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 1,736.00 Donate	<a href="http://www.imagehosting.us.com/showimage.php?id=11036&h=408701" target="_blank"> </a> GO STING CHAMELEON!

12-30-2004, 12:44 PM	#11
thunt Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: MY MOTHER WAS A SAINT!!! :punch: Gender: Posts: 1,117 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,593.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 5,093.00 Donate	AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!! Run for your lives! Eye-hurting backrounds, poorly done violence, hard-to-read text, and it confusing! Run!!!! So, um, yeah. But also make better text bubbles and don't try to make a house using game items and then drawing a crappy outline. [Psst! Astroman! For your sig, weirdo is spelled with the e before the i.] [ December 30, 2004, 04:41 PM: Message edited by: Tigt ]

12-30-2004, 01:57 PM	#12
RMC Member Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: Phoenix, NY Posts: 1,129 Thanks: 1 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Points: 10,538.05 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 11,038.05 Donate	Dude you have to much space on it it has bad backgrounds and the gore is bad. Really really bad. and why is Flame Mammoth just frozen there?

12-30-2004, 08:48 PM	#13
sladd54 Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: my parent\'s basement, right next to the cheers dartboard Posts: 355 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,222.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 4,722.00 Donate	That chameleon copter just scares me...and brings up a point! what the hell does Bowser have a clown copter? Is't he a dragon turtle thing?

12-30-2004, 10:14 PM	#14
thunt Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: MY MOTHER WAS A SAINT!!! :punch: Gender: Posts: 1,117 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,593.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 5,093.00 Donate	He bought it on ebay for 28 cents.

12-31-2004, 11:02 PM	#16
Gaara Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Megaman 8 Posts: 53 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 1,236.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 1,736.00 Donate	Sick of FMtS. Here's my new series where I make fun of cliche murder shows with the infamous "person finding a dead body" beginning. This is part 1: "Murdered Milde" <a href="http://www.imagehosting.us.com/showimage.php?id=11346&h=349724" target="_blank"> </a>

01-01-2005, 10:56 AM	#17
thunt Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: MY MOTHER WAS A SAINT!!! :punch: Gender: Posts: 1,117 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,593.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 5,093.00 Donate	Not very good. There was a lot of extra space, the props were pretty bad, and I have no idea why everyone else died when they found Milde dead.

01-02-2005, 11:19 AM	#20
A Genius Senior Member Join Date: May 2001 Location: Place Posts: 2,657 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 3,152.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 3,652.00 Donate	That was an improvement over the last one. Still, you've got a lot of wasted space and the jokes could be played out better. Also, what was up with Lakitu at the end? -A Genius (A hose way no.)