The adventures of Tech and Z! - VGF

Spritedude · 07-14-2005, 12:49 AM

Well I had an idea for a comic so here it is.

I'll post a new comic every few days. Give comments please!

Ghost Kitty · 07-14-2005, 01:52 PM

The backgrounds are well done, but the teleportation sequence seems sloppy, Z just looks like a bad recolor, and the humor needs improvment, and why are the speech bubbles connected if there are different people talking? Also, teleporting into Super Mario's wold is highly unoriginal.

Overall, this comic needs quite a bit of improvment...

Spritedude · 07-14-2005, 02:32 PM

I didn't even try to put that much humor cause I couldn't think of anything, it was really late and I was tired. I'll try to put more humor next time. The speech bubbles are like that so you know who talks first. And I'm going more for storyline and humor, not graphics. (I haven't started on humor yet though.) Anyways, thanks very much for the comment!

Glyph Phoenix · 07-14-2005, 03:15 PM

Your comic is neither funny nor interesting. Teleportation is overused and stupid when it wasn't. Your poor MM7 recolors aren't helping the matter.

You claim it to be a humorous/storyline thing yet you have no real storyline and no humor. Unless you really do fix this comic in further installments, which I doubt you have the mental capacity to do, you fail.

Ghost Kitty · 07-14-2005, 04:06 PM

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Originally posted by Tech kid:
I didn't even try to put that much humor cause I couldn't think of anything, it was really late and I was tired. I'll try to put more humor next time. The speech bubbles are like that so you know who talks first. And I'm going more for storyline and humor, not graphics. (I haven't started on humor yet though.) Anyways, thanks very much for the comment!

If you couldent think of anything, then you sould not be making a comic. And the way you made the speech bubbles made it look like olny one person was talking. And like Glyph said, this is unoriginal.

07-14-2005, 12:49 AM	#1
Spritedude Member Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: City by the Bay Gender: Posts: 928 Thanks: 14 Thanked 25 Times in 21 Posts Points: 11,977.64 Bank: 85,361.07 Total Points: 97,338.71 Donate	Well I had an idea for a comic so here it is. I'll post a new comic every few days. Give comments please!

07-14-2005, 01:52 PM	#2
Ghost Kitty Member Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: The place... THE PLACE!!! Gender: Posts: 787 Thanks: 4 Thanked 3 Times in 3 Posts Points: 9,809.87 Bank: 68.67 Total Points: 9,878.55 Donate	The backgrounds are well done, but the teleportation sequence seems sloppy, Z just looks like a bad recolor, and the humor needs improvment, and why are the speech bubbles connected if there are different people talking? Also, teleporting into Super Mario's wold is highly unoriginal. Overall, this comic needs quite a bit of improvment...

07-14-2005, 02:32 PM	#3
Spritedude Member Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: City by the Bay Gender: Posts: 928 Thanks: 14 Thanked 25 Times in 21 Posts Points: 11,977.64 Bank: 85,361.07 Total Points: 97,338.71 Donate	I didn't even try to put that much humor cause I couldn't think of anything, it was really late and I was tired. I'll try to put more humor next time. The speech bubbles are like that so you know who talks first. And I'm going more for storyline and humor, not graphics. (I haven't started on humor yet though.) Anyways, thanks very much for the comment!

07-14-2005, 03:15 PM	#4
Glyph Phoenix Member Join Date: Jul 2004 Gender: Posts: 1,774 Thanks: 2 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Points: 6,557.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 7,057.00 Donate	Your comic is neither funny nor interesting. Teleportation is overused and stupid when it wasn't. Your poor MM7 recolors aren't helping the matter. You claim it to be a humorous/storyline thing yet you have no real storyline and no humor. Unless you really do fix this comic in further installments, which I doubt you have the mental capacity to do, you fail.