Defenders of Ermaria, for real this time - Page 2 - VGF

ludwigvan · 07-29-2005, 02:23 PM

He's not a troll.

And while it wasn't painful, it wasn't funny. It was just... not good. Good job on making it non painful, though. Unfortunately, my main problem with it is the humor, which I can't help you with.

Lord_Zack · 07-29-2005, 09:20 PM

Chapter 2.5, uh I mean 3

[ July 29, 2005, 09:32 PM: Message edited by: Prince Zack of Ryland ]

Lord_Zack · 07-29-2005, 09:21 PM

.

The next one will be funnier, I promise

Glyph Phoenix · 07-30-2005, 08:02 AM

Don't make promises you can't keep.

Lord_Zack · 07-30-2005, 08:42 AM

Shut up

Austin Powers · 07-30-2005, 01:30 PM

The dialogue boxes are a small improvement, but it just doesn't make up for the bad humor. For your sake, I sure hope your next one is better because so far, this just isn't a good comic series.

Lord_Zack · 07-30-2005, 05:25 PM

I'm sorry, I just can't think of anything funny apparently.

thunt · 07-30-2005, 11:30 PM

Humor is pretty hard to do. Maybe your brand of humor just doesn't work with comics.

Glyph Phoenix · 07-31-2005, 02:06 PM

I'm disappointed in you, Tigt. It's pretty clear that this guy doesn't have any humor at all.

thunt · 07-31-2005, 03:01 PM

Will this reinstate my status?
http://www.drshnaps.com/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=806

I'm WWII On Ice, by the way.

Glyph Phoenix · 08-01-2005, 04:21 AM

Actually I've been pretty disappointed ever since you spazzed out when some idiot tried to associate you with me. I mean, hate me or not, the least you can do is be cool about it.

Right now you'd have to do something of "inventing a way for people to shoot lazers from their eyes" or greater to make me stop being disappointed in you.

thunt · 08-01-2005, 10:27 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Glyph Phoenix:
Actually I've been pretty disappointed ever since you spazzed out when some idiot tried to associate you with me. I mean, hate me or not, the least you can do is be cool about it.

The hell? When did I do that?

Lord_Zack · 08-01-2005, 06:14 PM

Hmmm, you know, when I started this comic, I had not read 8-bit Theater. Now I realize that It has the same basic plot! The same plot created independantly by two people. Except this one isn't as funny!

RMC · 08-01-2005, 11:59 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Prince Zack of Ryland:
Hmmm, you know, when I started this comic, I had not read 8-bit Theater. Now I realize that It has the same basic plot! The same plot created independantly by two people. Except this one isn't as funny!

...o...kay then.

Glyph Phoenix · 08-02-2005, 01:10 PM

^^^ Right here. Hateful, evil people have feelings too.

As for you, Mr. Ryland, you've got a lot to learn about sprite comics. 8-bit theatre may have done the whole misfits adventuring thing, but so have tons of other comics like RPG World. Your plot isn't THAT similar to 8-bit... if you've ever seen crap like "Final Fantasy Excursions" which totally rip off 8-bit theatre you should see that yours and 8-bit aren't even close.

So that's not your problem... the lack of humor and overall crappiness is. Poor sprite manipulation, crappy backgrounds, and of course the lack of funny jokes or interesting plotlines to give us a reason to read.

[ August 02, 2005, 02:47 PM: Message edited by: Glyph Phoenix ]

thunt · 08-02-2005, 01:31 PM

It says there's no such topic.
Are you making this up?

Lord_Zack · 08-02-2005, 02:09 PM

Chapter 4:In Darkest Night...

[ August 02, 2005, 03:10 PM: Message edited by: Prince Zack of Ryland ]

Lord_Zack · 08-02-2005, 02:09 PM

The Green Lantern in the last panel is a Tweeter. I made the John Stewart sprites out of a Final Fantasy 1 thief.

[ August 02, 2005, 02:11 PM: Message edited by: Prince Zack of Ryland ]

OcarinaMan · 08-02-2005, 02:31 PM

1. The Green Lantern barely shows up against the background.
2. The "mysterious bad guy" looks like a bad use of spray-paint tool. Try just taking a sprite and completely blacking it out to get the "shadow effect."
3. The last panel, you can hardly see the Tweeter at all. Plus, the background is annoyingly bright and looks, yet again, like a bad use of spray-paint tool.
4. You're making a typical "new writer" error of rushing in and forcing the plot. Back off and give us some time to get to know the characters. If you had given us a few comics of GL sneaking around the fortress or going about his business before being called to the fortress to let us get to know him, we'd care about his situation more.

Lord_Zack · 08-02-2005, 02:39 PM

I'll keep that in mind. Where the jokes good, or at least better?

07-29-2005, 02:23 PM	#21
ludwigvan Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: The well of wishes. Gender: Posts: 5,444 Thanks: 3 Thanked 10 Times in 10 Posts Points: 10,530.44 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 11,030.44 Donate	He's not a troll. And while it wasn't painful, it wasn't funny. It was just... not good. Good job on making it non painful, though. Unfortunately, my main problem with it is the humor, which I can't help you with.

07-29-2005, 09:20 PM	#22
Lord_Zack Member Join Date: Aug 2002 Gender: Posts: 752 Thanks: 22 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts Points: 11,842.55 Bank: 2,539.69 Total Points: 14,382.24 Donate	Chapter 2.5, uh I mean 3 [ July 29, 2005, 09:32 PM: Message edited by: Prince Zack of Ryland ]

07-29-2005, 09:21 PM	#23
Lord_Zack Member Join Date: Aug 2002 Gender: Posts: 752 Thanks: 22 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts Points: 11,842.55 Bank: 2,539.69 Total Points: 14,382.24 Donate	. The next one will be funnier, I promise

07-30-2005, 08:02 AM	#24
Glyph Phoenix Member Join Date: Jul 2004 Gender: Posts: 1,774 Thanks: 2 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Points: 6,547.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 7,047.00 Donate	Don't make promises you can't keep.

07-30-2005, 08:42 AM	#25
Lord_Zack Member Join Date: Aug 2002 Gender: Posts: 752 Thanks: 22 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts Points: 11,842.55 Bank: 2,539.69 Total Points: 14,382.24 Donate	Shut up

07-30-2005, 01:30 PM	#26
Austin Powers Member Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Karflorbenland Posts: 646 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 1,917.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 2,417.00 Donate	The dialogue boxes are a small improvement, but it just doesn't make up for the bad humor. For your sake, I sure hope your next one is better because so far, this just isn't a good comic series.

07-30-2005, 05:25 PM	#27
Lord_Zack Member Join Date: Aug 2002 Gender: Posts: 752 Thanks: 22 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts Points: 11,842.55 Bank: 2,539.69 Total Points: 14,382.24 Donate	I'm sorry, I just can't think of anything funny apparently.

07-30-2005, 11:30 PM	#28
thunt Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: MY MOTHER WAS A SAINT!!! :punch: Gender: Posts: 1,117 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,361.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 4,861.00 Donate	Humor is pretty hard to do. Maybe your brand of humor just doesn't work with comics.

07-31-2005, 02:06 PM	#29
Glyph Phoenix Member Join Date: Jul 2004 Gender: Posts: 1,774 Thanks: 2 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Points: 6,547.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 7,047.00 Donate	I'm disappointed in you, Tigt. It's pretty clear that this guy doesn't have any humor at all.

07-31-2005, 03:01 PM	#30
thunt Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: MY MOTHER WAS A SAINT!!! :punch: Gender: Posts: 1,117 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,361.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 4,861.00 Donate	Will this reinstate my status? http://www.drshnaps.com/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=806 I'm WWII On Ice, by the way.

08-01-2005, 04:21 AM	#31
Glyph Phoenix Member Join Date: Jul 2004 Gender: Posts: 1,774 Thanks: 2 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Points: 6,547.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 7,047.00 Donate	Actually I've been pretty disappointed ever since you spazzed out when some idiot tried to associate you with me. I mean, hate me or not, the least you can do is be cool about it. Right now you'd have to do something of "inventing a way for people to shoot lazers from their eyes" or greater to make me stop being disappointed in you.

08-01-2005, 06:14 PM	#33
Lord_Zack Member Join Date: Aug 2002 Gender: Posts: 752 Thanks: 22 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts Points: 11,842.55 Bank: 2,539.69 Total Points: 14,382.24 Donate	Hmmm, you know, when I started this comic, I had not read 8-bit Theater. Now I realize that It has the same basic plot! The same plot created independantly by two people. Except this one isn't as funny!

08-02-2005, 01:10 PM	#35
Glyph Phoenix Member Join Date: Jul 2004 Gender: Posts: 1,774 Thanks: 2 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Points: 6,547.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 7,047.00 Donate	^^^ Right here. Hateful, evil people have feelings too. As for you, Mr. Ryland, you've got a lot to learn about sprite comics. 8-bit theatre may have done the whole misfits adventuring thing, but so have tons of other comics like RPG World. Your plot isn't THAT similar to 8-bit... if you've ever seen crap like "Final Fantasy Excursions" which totally rip off 8-bit theatre you should see that yours and 8-bit aren't even close. So that's not your problem... the lack of humor and overall crappiness is. Poor sprite manipulation, crappy backgrounds, and of course the lack of funny jokes or interesting plotlines to give us a reason to read. [ August 02, 2005, 02:47 PM: Message edited by: Glyph Phoenix ]

08-02-2005, 01:31 PM	#36
thunt Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: MY MOTHER WAS A SAINT!!! :punch: Gender: Posts: 1,117 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,361.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 4,861.00 Donate	It says there's no such topic. Are you making this up?

08-02-2005, 02:09 PM	#37
Lord_Zack Member Join Date: Aug 2002 Gender: Posts: 752 Thanks: 22 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts Points: 11,842.55 Bank: 2,539.69 Total Points: 14,382.24 Donate	Chapter 4:In Darkest Night... [ August 02, 2005, 03:10 PM: Message edited by: Prince Zack of Ryland ]

08-02-2005, 02:31 PM	#39
OcarinaMan Member Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Ikana Castle Posts: 2,482 Thanks: 1 Thanked 5 Times in 3 Posts Points: 7,797.77 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 8,297.77 Donate	1. The Green Lantern barely shows up against the background. 2. The "mysterious bad guy" looks like a bad use of spray-paint tool. Try just taking a sprite and completely blacking it out to get the "shadow effect." 3. The last panel, you can hardly see the Tweeter at all. Plus, the background is annoyingly bright and looks, yet again, like a bad use of spray-paint tool. 4. You're making a typical "new writer" error of rushing in and forcing the plot. Back off and give us some time to get to know the characters. If you had given us a few comics of GL sneaking around the fortress or going about his business before being called to the fortress to let us get to know him, we'd care about his situation more.

08-02-2005, 02:39 PM	#40
Lord_Zack Member Join Date: Aug 2002 Gender: Posts: 752 Thanks: 22 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts Points: 11,842.55 Bank: 2,539.69 Total Points: 14,382.24 Donate	I'll keep that in mind. Where the jokes good, or at least better?