I present Goomblue and Koopbrown

mario-*crossout*-luigifan · 08-12-2005, 11:51 AM

If it gets good ratings I might post new chapters.

Wait,I fixed text.

[ August 12, 2005, 11:58 AM: Message edited by: mario-*crossout*-luigifan ]

**Dylan** · 08-12-2005, 12:25 PM

There is no way this can possibly get the good ratings you're hoping for.

- Your main characters are lame recolors.
- Your frames are hand-drawn; they're crooked and uneven, and just look like crap.
- The bittage and effects just plain suck. What's with that heart? That thing could slit someone's throat. And you obviously resized by hand. How many times must we emphasize this?! NO!!
- The story just doesn't flow, and I certainly hope you weren't trying to be funny, because I saw it as a tragedy of epic proportions. And where does Mario come up with a "weird button"?
- Complete lack of backgrounds, even in space.

And if you think I was harsh, wait till Glyph sees it.

~Dylan

Codiekitty · 08-12-2005, 01:44 PM

At first I thought Goomblue was a Bob-Omb.

Why does everybody go from fuzzy and blurry to clear and back again?

And what the hell is going on?

Where are these lemmings going? The Super Nintendo Super Shire! Hop in line and follow them there!

Mr.Hammermap · 08-12-2005, 02:40 PM

How did that gomba get hurt? You have no sensible plot, two characters reappear out of no where, no backround, bad resizings, everything was too random to be funny, and the comic overall stunk. If you want to resize something, use the option "Sketch/skew" and on sketch's two text areas, change 100 into 200. The size will double. Do that more for a bigger size. But only make it a number such as 100, 200, 300 etc. because otherwise, the size will be as messed up as your crappy resizings. This and everything Codie and Dylan pointed out are wrong with this stupid comic, and what Glyph is going to say is going to be just as truthful (and probably harsh).

[ August 12, 2005, 02:43 PM: Message edited by: Chompmaster: Reloaded ]

Metal Man · 08-12-2005, 03:06 PM

Looks like you took a couple Mario sprites and put them in a blender.

i thot u wer my frend · 08-12-2005, 04:14 PM

I'm insulted by this comic

Glyph Phoenix · 08-12-2005, 06:55 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Dylan:
And if you think I was harsh, wait till Glyph sees it.

Bah. I've been abusing Newton's Third Law of Awesome.

See, this is obviously not a good comic. We know that. Dylan went over why. Even Panfan was insulted. Once the problems are identified give the comicmaker a chance to fix all the problems.

And if he still has the same problems, then you gotta kick your criticism up a notch.

Now here's what else you need to do:

"You're" and "Your" are different words. Your means Goomblue owns something, "You're" is what you should have put.
Introduce characters before you just have them randomly appear. Like... well, every character did.
Just don't resize sprites at all if you can't handle it.
Same with backgrounds. While white space really sucks, I have the feeling that you'll get even worse (you'll go for the whole "box around the sprite" look) if you try for backgrounds.
Finally, most importantly, make it either funny or interesting. If we don't care about your ****ty characters and they're not entertaining us somehow we won't read anymore.

Demonicus Prime · 08-12-2005, 07:56 PM

I'VE BEEN VIOLATED!! Is there nothing sacred anymore? With the panels, yeah, they do look hand-drawn. Yuck. What's with the Earth? Is that a black hole? What does that have ANYTHING to do with the plot. And what weird button? The uh, jump button? Right. My cat can copy and paste stuff like this. (yes, I'm bragging) Don't change the colors. Just don't. *shudders* Better luck next time, I guess.

Alph · 08-12-2005, 09:48 PM

ZE GOGGLES! ZEY DO NOTHING!

indexcard · 08-15-2005, 07:14 PM

Here is what I think,
Frames: crappy.
sprites: Blurry,Clear,Blurry,Clear.
comic: a waste of time.
and I have some questions. 1 if goomblue pushed the girl (the girl he had a crush on but had to rescue because mario appeared out of nowhere)to the right of the frame how could they come falling down from the top? 2 What does the button do? 3 Why would bowser say, "You failed? Let's go I'll help you,"? Becase bowser doesn't seem like someone who'd let his minions fail without getting mad and he said "Let's go." Why would he say that when there was no clue to where mario had gone.

08-12-2005, 11:51 AM	#1
mario-crossout-luigifan Newbie Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 2 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 719.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 1,219.00 Donate	If it gets good ratings I might post new chapters. Wait,I fixed text. [ August 12, 2005, 11:58 AM: Message edited by: mario-crossout-luigifan ]

08-12-2005, 12:25 PM	#2
Dylan Banned Mod Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Teenage Wasteland Gender: Posts: 6,280 Thanks: 951 Thanked 944 Times in 435 Posts Points: 32,789.76 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 32,789.77 Donate	There is no way this can possibly get the good ratings you're hoping for. - Your main characters are lame recolors. - Your frames are hand-drawn; they're crooked and uneven, and just look like crap. - The bittage and effects just plain suck. What's with that heart? That thing could slit someone's throat. And you obviously resized by hand. How many times must we emphasize this?! NO!! - The story just doesn't flow, and I certainly hope you weren't trying to be funny, because I saw it as a tragedy of epic proportions. And where does Mario come up with a "weird button"? - Complete lack of backgrounds, even in space. And if you think I was harsh, wait till Glyph sees it. ~Dylan

08-12-2005, 01:44 PM	#3
Codiekitty Just Another Face in Red Jumpsuit Join Date: May 2001 Location: Lemmingland Gender: Posts: 19,143 Thanks: 121 Thanked 174 Times in 120 Posts Points: 45,974.72 Bank: 3,021,450.74 Total Points: 3,067,425.46 Donate	At first I thought Goomblue was a Bob-Omb. Why does everybody go from fuzzy and blurry to clear and back again? And what the hell is going on? Where are these lemmings going? The Super Nintendo Super Shire! Hop in line and follow them there!

08-12-2005, 02:40 PM	#4
Mr.Hammermap Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: POUNDS OF BEER Posts: 479 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 5,747.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 6,247.00 Donate	How did that gomba get hurt? You have no sensible plot, two characters reappear out of no where, no backround, bad resizings, everything was too random to be funny, and the comic overall stunk. If you want to resize something, use the option "Sketch/skew" and on sketch's two text areas, change 100 into 200. The size will double. Do that more for a bigger size. But only make it a number such as 100, 200, 300 etc. because otherwise, the size will be as messed up as your crappy resizings. This and everything Codie and Dylan pointed out are wrong with this stupid comic, and what Glyph is going to say is going to be just as truthful (and probably harsh). [ August 12, 2005, 02:43 PM: Message edited by: Chompmaster: Reloaded ]

08-12-2005, 03:06 PM	#5
Metal Man Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2000 Location: Gender: Posts: 6,747 Thanks: 74 Thanked 199 Times in 137 Posts Points: 10,105.63 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 10,105.63 Donate	Looks like you took a couple Mario sprites and put them in a blender.

08-12-2005, 04:14 PM	#6
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08-12-2005, 07:56 PM	#8
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08-12-2005, 09:48 PM	#9
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08-15-2005, 07:14 PM	#10
indexcard Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2004 Posts: 37 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 1,087.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 1,587.00 Donate	Here is what I think, Frames: crappy. sprites: Blurry,Clear,Blurry,Clear. comic: a waste of time. and I have some questions. 1 if goomblue pushed the girl (the girl he had a crush on but had to rescue because mario appeared out of nowhere)to the right of the frame how could they come falling down from the top? 2 What does the button do? 3 Why would bowser say, "You failed? Let's go I'll help you,"? Becase bowser doesn't seem like someone who'd let his minions fail without getting mad and he said "Let's go." Why would he say that when there was no clue to where mario had gone.