Nintendo Wars, for lack of a better name....

Lord_Zack · 08-22-2005, 02:32 PM

The prolouge to my new comic, but don't expect a new episode until I can ensure it's good. I may or may not continue the Heros.
Prolouge

Mikhail Gorbachev · 08-22-2005, 05:51 PM

There isn't even a joke, and the backgrounds suck. Black voids in a castle? The same explosion used three times in one panel? Mixed Bittages?

**L007 is Cooler than Dylan** · 08-22-2005, 07:21 PM

^ Why the hell does everyone want a joke? Not all comics need humor in every strip. Have you ever read Super Adventure Quint? It's far superior to Bob and George, and SAQ has mostly a serious-type plot.

Cataclysmic Paradox · 08-22-2005, 08:49 PM

You should try to keep your comics in one topic, unless your old one has been locked. This one's not bad, compared to some comics I've seen. The bittage mixing wasn't too bad, and the repeated explosions took a minute to notice. This first one is short, but anyone could say the same about my newer comics... And XM42SUCROSE (Pixelated Penguin...?), there was a joke in the last panel.

**Dylan** · 08-22-2005, 09:36 PM

Gah...make better holes, man. It looks like some third-grader just glued on badly-cut pieces of black construction paper. DEPTH!! DEPTH, I say!!

~Dylan

Glyph Phoenix · 08-23-2005, 09:58 AM

^^^Because this comic doesn't have any interesting characters or plotlines like SAQ. SAQ had stuff like Copy Rock. Which is awesome. If you can make something awesome like Copy Rock then you don't have to have jokes.

But this comic clearly has no such thing. And without being funny or interesting, my rule is, it's not worth reading.

Nintendo JJW: Mr. Biscuit · 08-23-2005, 03:23 PM

Peach looks like she's standing on air.

Mikhail Gorbachev · 08-23-2005, 04:25 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Jumi Jao:
You should try to keep your comics in one topic, unless your old one has been locked. This one's not bad, compared to some comics I've seen. The bittage mixing wasn't too bad, and the repeated explosions took a minute to notice. This first one is short, but anyone could say the same about my newer comics... And XM42SUCROSE (Pixelated Penguin...?), there was a joke in the last panel.

Someone actually knows who I am? Yes, I am Pixilated Penguin. And I just noticed the joke, it wasn't funny.

thunt · 08-23-2005, 05:50 PM

I knew it was Pix for a while.
JJW? You came back?

Lord_Zack · 10-01-2005, 12:03 PM

Note: I will be posting the first comic soon, but there is bit of a plot change. Now it is dealing with the aftermath of Paper Mario:TTYD.

thunt · 10-02-2005, 09:45 AM

Eh, had some free time, so I wanted to yell at someone.

I understand you were going for that whole, "dark and dreary apocalypse war intro" thing, but it's failing pretty badly. For one, it's not long enough. Now, there is a fine line between enough and too much, but it wouldn't hurt to include three panels of exposition.
Plus, the whole first panel ruins any sadness you were aiming for, and instead makes people laugh out loud. Check that, retch. The sky is horrible. I have a feeling unless you live at the South pole or something, you haven't forgotten what a sunny sky looks like. IT's blue. With a lot of white mixed in, creating not a heavily saturated normal blue, or a "burn-your-eyes-out" light blue/teal, but something no one really bothers to look at because it doesn't grab for their attention.
Plus, would it really be so hard to fill in that spot next to the castle?
As mentiond, the holes in the castle suck. If anything, they should be more rounded, and look like there is in actuality, something behind them.
And for some rerason that castle looks very good for one that apparently was besieged, or at least the illusion of doing so.
There are major problems with the second panel as well, but the only one I think that wasn't covered was that a whole ship was disabled by the little green airplane, considering BRonto Burts can't do anything.
Last, work out the problems between the clashing viewpoints.
So ends a stupid and pointless rant. Good day.

Lord_Zack · 10-06-2005, 06:31 PM

I will be posting a new introduction. The story will involve a war between Saurasaland and the Waffle Kingdom.

[ October 06, 2005, 06:34 PM: Message edited by: Prince Zack of Ryland ]

08-22-2005, 02:32 PM	#1
Lord_Zack Member Join Date: Aug 2002 Gender: Posts: 752 Thanks: 22 Thanked 5 Times in 5 Posts Points: 12,596.55 Bank: 2,590.48 Total Points: 15,187.03 Donate	The prolouge to my new comic, but don't expect a new episode until I can ensure it's good. I may or may not continue the Heros. Prolouge

08-22-2005, 05:51 PM	#2
Mikhail Gorbachev Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2004 Gender: Posts: 9,593 Thanks: 30 Thanked 81 Times in 65 Posts Points: 816.54 Bank: 32,290.67 Total Points: 33,107.21 Donate	There isn't even a joke, and the backgrounds suck. Black voids in a castle? The same explosion used three times in one panel? Mixed Bittages?

08-22-2005, 07:21 PM	#3
L007 is Cooler than Dylan WELL I AM. Join Date: May 2001 Location: Farmerland. Gender: Posts: 7,536 Thanks: 101 Thanked 343 Times in 202 Posts Points: 1,813.03 Bank: 32,057.30 Total Points: 33,870.33 Donate	^ Why the hell does everyone want a joke? Not all comics need humor in every strip. Have you ever read Super Adventure Quint? It's far superior to Bob and George, and SAQ has mostly a serious-type plot.

08-22-2005, 08:49 PM	#4
Cataclysmic Paradox Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: Hiding from the voices... Shh... Gender: Posts: 576 Thanks: 4 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Points: 7,058.02 Bank: 27,619.25 Total Points: 34,677.27 Donate	You should try to keep your comics in one topic, unless your old one has been locked. This one's not bad, compared to some comics I've seen. The bittage mixing wasn't too bad, and the repeated explosions took a minute to notice. This first one is short, but anyone could say the same about my newer comics... And XM42SUCROSE (Pixelated Penguin...?), there was a joke in the last panel.

08-22-2005, 09:36 PM	#5
Dylan Banned Mod Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Teenage Wasteland Gender: Posts: 6,361 Thanks: 1,004 Thanked 1,000 Times in 457 Posts Points: 38,221.10 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 38,221.10 Donate	Gah...make better holes, man. It looks like some third-grader just glued on badly-cut pieces of black construction paper. DEPTH!! DEPTH, I say!! ~Dylan

08-23-2005, 09:58 AM	#6
Glyph Phoenix Member Join Date: Jul 2004 Gender: Posts: 1,774 Thanks: 2 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Points: 7,014.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 7,514.00 Donate	^^^Because this comic doesn't have any interesting characters or plotlines like SAQ. SAQ had stuff like Copy Rock. Which is awesome. If you can make something awesome like Copy Rock then you don't have to have jokes. But this comic clearly has no such thing. And without being funny or interesting, my rule is, it's not worth reading.

08-23-2005, 03:23 PM	#7
Nintendo JJW: Mr. Biscuit Junior Member Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Seattle Gender: Posts: 32 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Points: 1,322.75 Bank: 557.83 Total Points: 1,880.58 Donate	Peach looks like she's standing on air.

08-23-2005, 05:50 PM	#9
thunt Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: MY MOTHER WAS A SAINT!!! :punch: Gender: Posts: 1,117 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,581.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 5,081.00 Donate	I knew it was Pix for a while. JJW? You came back?

10-01-2005, 12:03 PM	#10
Lord_Zack Member Join Date: Aug 2002 Gender: Posts: 752 Thanks: 22 Thanked 5 Times in 5 Posts Points: 12,596.55 Bank: 2,590.48 Total Points: 15,187.03 Donate	Note: I will be posting the first comic soon, but there is bit of a plot change. Now it is dealing with the aftermath of Paper Mario:TTYD.

10-02-2005, 09:45 AM	#11
thunt Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: MY MOTHER WAS A SAINT!!! :punch: Gender: Posts: 1,117 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 4,581.00 Bank: 500.00 Total Points: 5,081.00 Donate	Eh, had some free time, so I wanted to yell at someone. I understand you were going for that whole, "dark and dreary apocalypse war intro" thing, but it's failing pretty badly. For one, it's not long enough. Now, there is a fine line between enough and too much, but it wouldn't hurt to include three panels of exposition. Plus, the whole first panel ruins any sadness you were aiming for, and instead makes people laugh out loud. Check that, retch. The sky is horrible. I have a feeling unless you live at the South pole or something, you haven't forgotten what a sunny sky looks like. IT's blue. With a lot of white mixed in, creating not a heavily saturated normal blue, or a "burn-your-eyes-out" light blue/teal, but something no one really bothers to look at because it doesn't grab for their attention. Plus, would it really be so hard to fill in that spot next to the castle? As mentiond, the holes in the castle suck. If anything, they should be more rounded, and look like there is in actuality, something behind them. And for some rerason that castle looks very good for one that apparently was besieged, or at least the illusion of doing so. There are major problems with the second panel as well, but the only one I think that wasn't covered was that a whole ship was disabled by the little green airplane, considering BRonto Burts can't do anything. Last, work out the problems between the clashing viewpoints. So ends a stupid and pointless rant. Good day.

10-06-2005, 06:31 PM	#12
Lord_Zack Member Join Date: Aug 2002 Gender: Posts: 752 Thanks: 22 Thanked 5 Times in 5 Posts Points: 12,596.55 Bank: 2,590.48 Total Points: 15,187.03 Donate	I will be posting a new introduction. The story will involve a war between Saurasaland and the Waffle Kingdom. [ October 06, 2005, 06:34 PM: Message edited by: Prince Zack of Ryland ]