this iz ware ill post my comix - Page 2 - VGF

Lord_Zack · 02-12-2006, 07:04 AM

I have something to tell you. When you've just posted, and no one else has posted yet, it's best to edit you're posts if you want to add new information.

Metal Man · 02-12-2006, 06:04 PM

Mildly better, though it seems to be the same style as the earlier iterations.

**Dylan** · 02-12-2006, 10:45 PM

Well...there are backgrounds, I'll say that much. What's with Tails' dialogue being broken up? If it's because the panels are too small, then maybe you should enlarge them a bit. And by a bit, I mean a lot. Seriously, this is one of the smallest comics in terms of size I've ever seen around here. Bigger panels allows you to develop plot more and enhance your graphics a little bit. It's sort of a spectacle; it's the amazing pyrotechnics to your Rammstein show.

As far as the plot goes...um...I don't really know how to say it without making a total ass of the both of us. I'm conflicted about the cliffhanger. On one hand, it keeps the reader coming back to see what will happen in the next comic. On the other hand, it doesn't really give a sense of finality in the comic.

The biggest problem I have is with the way the dialogue is set up altogether. You really don't need to have different colored speech bubbles. As long as you can attribute the text legibly to the respective character, there shouldn't really be a problem. Again, larger panels. And for the love of God, learn to align the lines properly. It almost feels like they're singing, raising and lowering words like that.

Needs work. Keep at it.

~Dylan

BLUEDASH2 · 03-07-2006, 12:19 AM

okay you can come back i had a virus so it took a while my comics are going to be small panel sonic comics

BLUEDASH2 · 03-07-2006, 12:22 AM

DYLAN there sprite comics!!

[If you stretch the page like that again, then you might as well not post in this forum. Not only that, but that made little to no sense. If you have a problem, you PM me. -Dylan]

Crazybirdanimations · 03-08-2006, 02:27 AM

HEY!! I need permission to get in!! please let me in...PLEASE!

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Lord_Zack Member Join Date: Aug 2002 Gender: Posts: 752 Thanks: 22 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts Points: 11,881.55 Bank: 2,539.69 Total Points: 14,421.24 Donate	I have something to tell you. When you've just posted, and no one else has posted yet, it's best to edit you're posts if you want to add new information.

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Metal Man Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2000 Location: Gender: Posts: 6,712 Thanks: 74 Thanked 191 Times in 131 Posts Points: 8,343.22 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 8,343.22 Donate	Mildly better, though it seems to be the same style as the earlier iterations.

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Dylan Banned Mod Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Teenage Wasteland Gender: Posts: 6,107 Thanks: 860 Thanked 880 Times in 402 Posts Points: 31,009.58 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 31,009.59 Donate	Well...there are backgrounds, I'll say that much. What's with Tails' dialogue being broken up? If it's because the panels are too small, then maybe you should enlarge them a bit. And by a bit, I mean a lot. Seriously, this is one of the smallest comics in terms of size I've ever seen around here. Bigger panels allows you to develop plot more and enhance your graphics a little bit. It's sort of a spectacle; it's the amazing pyrotechnics to your Rammstein show. As far as the plot goes...um...I don't really know how to say it without making a total ass of the both of us. I'm conflicted about the cliffhanger. On one hand, it keeps the reader coming back to see what will happen in the next comic. On the other hand, it doesn't really give a sense of finality in the comic. The biggest problem I have is with the way the dialogue is set up altogether. You really don't need to have different colored speech bubbles. As long as you can attribute the text legibly to the respective character, there shouldn't really be a problem. Again, larger panels. And for the love of God, learn to align the lines properly. It almost feels like they're singing, raising and lowering words like that. Needs work. Keep at it. ~Dylan

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BLUEDASH2 Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2006 Gender: Posts: 186 Thanks: 2 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 5,448.86 Bank: 4,591.86 Total Points: 10,040.72 Donate	okay you can come back i had a virus so it took a while my comics are going to be small panel sonic comics