My first Comic - VGF

Insert unfunny meme here · 04-24-2006, 02:48 PM

I have made a comic. It's basically an intro to what could probably be a series.

[img=http://img278.imageshack.us/img278/392/green13qc.png]

Insert unfunny meme here · 04-25-2006, 09:58 PM

Hello, any comments?

***Ace Mercury*** · 04-25-2006, 11:39 PM

I'll drop some comments.

There's a narrative style going on. There's some lame jokes, like where some character says something, the other characters react with horror, and then it turns out to be not true. There's also the joke where it looks like the comic author is running out of steam midway through making the comic ("Well, that sucked."), which fails to 'wow' me. The crack about Malt Shoppes was decent, though, although you didn't need to mention it was beside that guy's house.

There's frames where action happens, like when CN's head falls from the sky; these scenes are boring, and do not add much to the humour. The characters are 'bleh', without any real substance to them. I realize they are sprites, but they take up far too small a space for the frame size; this distances them from us (and the action) and makes for uninteresting graphics. Compare with other popular (sprite?) webcomics, where characters take up much of the frame and are more in-your-face.

The background is completely white, which is kind of disappointing. Awkwardly, you use a coloured-font against it, which makes it kind of hard to read; darker colours would work better against white. The text is sloppy: lines cross through text and text is not aligned properly. The idea to give each character a different colour is a nice one, but you use similar colours which makes it hard to remember (we're not studying your comic for an exam, we're glossing it over to get to the funny parts).

There are some nagging things: the left-most 'action' line on CN's head remains even though it's on the ground, there are grammar mistakes ("Those still exists?"), and, yes, I hate using the action lines to denote movement.

On the techincal side, I noticed you used PNG format for your comic. Yes, this is normally a good format for sprite comics, because it is normally lossless, but for some reason text is blurry, yet jagged artifacts remain on CN's head. I'm not too familiar with PNG, but it looks like you've used dithering (unintentionally?) on it, which ruins the point of using a nice, clean PNG. If you're interested, you can read up more about image formats from Google (BFF!) or check this link.

**Dylan** · 04-26-2006, 01:38 PM

^ About the PNG thing: A lot of spriters, including myself, prefer not to make comics in a program which suports the PNG format because it's a little tougher. Instead, the comic is made and saved on Paint, then reopened and saved as a PNG. He probably saved it as a JPG before reopening and saving it as a PNG.

~Dylan

***Ace Mercury*** · 04-26-2006, 01:57 PM

Ouch. All of blurriness of a JPEG with the filesize of a PNG.

**Crazyswordsman** · 04-26-2006, 04:35 PM

I actually use PNGs for shorts. For longer comix, I have a nifty GIF converter. -CSM

585 · 04-26-2006, 07:25 PM

I liked it. It was like one of those short shows on T.V. good work.

Insert unfunny meme here · 04-27-2006, 08:53 PM

By the way, It wasn't supposed to be that funny. If I make more, they'll get better.

Alink - VCR Man. VCR. · 05-16-2006, 06:09 PM

Woah! I remember all of you guys!

WOAH!

Anyways. Remember, Jpg's are Baaaaad.

Here's a way to remember:

J - J(silent)crap
P - Poop
G - Grandma

And you don't want to change grandma's diaper, eh? EH? So I suggest you don't use them.

Bahahahahahha!

***Ace Mercury*** · 05-16-2006, 09:13 PM

Um... that's not helping. Plus JPEGs rocks your box.

Alink - VCR Man. VCR. · 05-22-2006, 01:31 PM

^ Das how I remember to not use 'em, dude.

chad120 · 06-08-2006, 06:59 PM

haaha chuck norris

Lonewolfe · 06-19-2006, 01:42 AM

That is pretty good.

MC Luigi · 06-20-2006, 09:34 AM

I don't like them much....it was okay.

Irby · 07-19-2006, 01:58 PM

I thought the comic was good but not great but not bad but not horrifingly terrible but not the best but not...

ah you get the picture.Just put more effort in or we'll hear those characters talk about the comic and all they are going to say about it is well that sucked.

04-24-2006, 02:48 PM	#1
Insert unfunny meme here Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Planet X Gender: Posts: 3,807 Thanks: 278 Thanked 182 Times in 128 Posts Points: 23,536.55 Bank: 39,862.92 Total Points: 63,399.46 Donate	My first Comic I have made a comic. It's basically an intro to what could probably be a series. [img=http://img278.imageshack.us/img278/392/green13qc.png]

04-25-2006, 11:39 PM	#3
*Ace Mercury* Marshmallow Knight ☆ Supermod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Southern Ontario Gender: Posts: 18,948 Thanks: 360 Thanked 1,501 Times in 783 Posts Blog Entries: 1 Points: 98,132.91 Bank: 12,202,050.71 Total Points: 12,300,183.62 Donate	I like talking. I'll drop some comments. There's a narrative style going on. There's some lame jokes, like where some character says something, the other characters react with horror, and then it turns out to be not true. There's also the joke where it looks like the comic author is running out of steam midway through making the comic ("Well, that sucked."), which fails to 'wow' me. The crack about Malt Shoppes was decent, though, although you didn't need to mention it was beside that guy's house. There's frames where action happens, like when CN's head falls from the sky; these scenes are boring, and do not add much to the humour. The characters are 'bleh', without any real substance to them. I realize they are sprites, but they take up far too small a space for the frame size; this distances them from us (and the action) and makes for uninteresting graphics. Compare with other popular (sprite?) webcomics, where characters take up much of the frame and are more in-your-face. The background is completely white, which is kind of disappointing. Awkwardly, you use a coloured-font against it, which makes it kind of hard to read; darker colours would work better against white. The text is sloppy: lines cross through text and text is not aligned properly. The idea to give each character a different colour is a nice one, but you use similar colours which makes it hard to remember (we're not studying your comic for an exam, we're glossing it over to get to the funny parts). There are some nagging things: the left-most 'action' line on CN's head remains even though it's on the ground, there are grammar mistakes ("Those still exists?"), and, yes, I hate using the action lines to denote movement. On the techincal side, I noticed you used PNG format for your comic. Yes, this is normally a good format for sprite comics, because it is normally lossless, but for some reason text is blurry, yet jagged artifacts remain on CN's head. I'm not too familiar with PNG, but it looks like you've used dithering (unintentionally?) on it, which ruins the point of using a nice, clean PNG. If you're interested, you can read up more about image formats from Google (BFF!) or check this link.

04-25-2006, 09:58 PM	#2
Insert unfunny meme here Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Planet X Gender: Posts: 3,807 Thanks: 278 Thanked 182 Times in 128 Posts Points: 23,536.55 Bank: 39,862.92 Total Points: 63,399.46 Donate	Hello, any comments?

04-26-2006, 01:38 PM	#4
Dylan Banned Mod Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Teenage Wasteland Gender: Posts: 6,102 Thanks: 856 Thanked 876 Times in 400 Posts Points: 30,721.92 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 30,721.93 Donate	^ About the PNG thing: A lot of spriters, including myself, prefer not to make comics in a program which suports the PNG format because it's a little tougher. Instead, the comic is made and saved on Paint, then reopened and saved as a PNG. He probably saved it as a JPG before reopening and saving it as a PNG. ~Dylan

04-26-2006, 01:57 PM	#5
*Ace Mercury* Marshmallow Knight ☆ Supermod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Southern Ontario Gender: Posts: 18,948 Thanks: 360 Thanked 1,501 Times in 783 Posts Blog Entries: 1 Points: 98,132.91 Bank: 12,202,050.71 Total Points: 12,300,183.62 Donate	Ouch. All of blurriness of a JPEG with the filesize of a PNG.

04-26-2006, 04:35 PM	#6
Crazyswordsman RPG Mod Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Booyaville (yeah!) Gender: Posts: 7,980 Thanks: 538 Thanked 373 Times in 256 Posts Points: 126,599.11 Bank: 26,695.24 Total Points: 153,294.34 Donate	I actually use PNGs for shorts. For longer comix, I have a nifty GIF converter. -CSM

04-26-2006, 07:25 PM	#7
585 Newbie Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Rochester, NY Gender: Posts: 10 Thanks: 1 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 1,585.00 Bank: 563.14 Total Points: 2,148.14 Donate	I liked it. It was like one of those short shows on T.V. good work.

04-27-2006, 08:53 PM	#8
Insert unfunny meme here Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Planet X Gender: Posts: 3,807 Thanks: 278 Thanked 182 Times in 128 Posts Points: 23,536.55 Bank: 39,862.92 Total Points: 63,399.46 Donate	By the way, It wasn't supposed to be that funny. If I make more, they'll get better.

05-16-2006, 06:09 PM	#9
Alink - VCR Man. VCR. Member Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: Behind The Wall Of Sleep. Gender: Posts: 768 Thanks: 2 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Points: 4,635.99 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 4,635.99 Donate	Woah! I remember all of you guys! WOAH! Anyways. Remember, Jpg's are Baaaaad. Here's a way to remember: J - J(silent)crap P - Poop G - Grandma And you don't want to change grandma's diaper, eh? EH? So I suggest you don't use them. Bahahahahahha!

05-16-2006, 09:13 PM	#10
*Ace Mercury* Marshmallow Knight ☆ Supermod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Southern Ontario Gender: Posts: 18,948 Thanks: 360 Thanked 1,501 Times in 783 Posts Blog Entries: 1 Points: 98,132.91 Bank: 12,202,050.71 Total Points: 12,300,183.62 Donate	Um... that's not helping. Plus JPEGs rocks your box.

05-22-2006, 01:31 PM	#11
Alink - VCR Man. VCR. Member Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: Behind The Wall Of Sleep. Gender: Posts: 768 Thanks: 2 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Points: 4,635.99 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 4,635.99 Donate	^ Das how I remember to not use 'em, dude.

06-08-2006, 06:59 PM	#12
chad120 Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: texas Gender: Posts: 30 Thanks: 3 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 1,725.46 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 1,725.46 Donate	haaha chuck norris

06-19-2006, 01:42 AM	#13
Lonewolfe Newbie Join Date: Jun 2006 Gender: Posts: 4 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Points: 305.78 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 305.78 Donate	That is pretty good.

06-20-2006, 09:34 AM	#14
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 13 Times in 13 Posts Points: 8,855.64 Bank: 23,165.44 Total Points: 32,021.07 Donate	I don't like them much....it was okay.

07-19-2006, 01:58 PM	#15
Irby Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Canada, Eh. Gender: Posts: 6,448 Thanks: 306 Thanked 93 Times in 78 Posts Blog Entries: 5 Points: 37,520.60 Bank: 13,655.09 Total Points: 51,175.69 Donate	I thought the comic was good but not great but not bad but not horrifingly terrible but not the best but not... ah you get the picture.Just put more effort in or we'll hear those characters talk about the comic and all they are going to say about it is well that sucked.