Luigi's evil plan (It'll work now.)

KING 1-UP SALESMAN · 06-12-2008, 02:47 PM

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Oops wrong pic I'll post the right one now[IMG]URL=http://www.slide.com/s/nO1T_Uzk1T8GpZ2aFlvNKX6K8-h3kzE4?referrer=hlnk]

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[/IMG]Let me make it bigger

Okay.. next comic I'll make the text bigger.

Just tell me if you can't read the text and I'll post the dialogue.

Mush Man · 06-12-2008, 02:49 PM

all I can read is "who are you talking to Luigi"

BTW all you have to do to post a picture is copy it from host site and paste it here.

KING 1-UP SALESMAN · 06-12-2008, 02:56 PM

Oh..so I don't have to do the insert image..

Here's dialogue:
Luigi:For years now....
(next panel)
Luigi:Mario has taken all the fame....
(next panel)
Luigi:And I have only gotten two games....
(next panel)
Luigi:..which were no good....but now...Mario shall pay!!!
(next panel)
Luigi:.........
Mario:Who are you talking to, Luigi?

Dr. Zero · 06-12-2008, 03:03 PM

http://item.slide.com/r/1/103/i/HNmX...5ANUjVkrv4BWV/

There ya go. I put the first picture in as a link because it's enormous.

Mush Man · 06-12-2008, 03:07 PM

edit: forget it.

KING 1-UP SALESMAN · 06-12-2008, 03:20 PM

Thanks Dark Zero

***Ace Mercury*** · 06-12-2008, 03:37 PM

I have issues with your comic, which will no doubt deter everyone from reading it:

Panels are empty and have badly scaled sprites. With sprites, you want to make sure that you're not just scaling it freehand, and also avoid embarrassing gaffs like having a backwards "L" on Luigi's hat.
The text is hard to read, especially Luigi's light green on white text. It is too small and otherwise illegible.
They're BMP files, which are enormous. You want to use GIF or PNG for sprite comics - if you're using MSPaint, you can do a "Save as..." and choose one of those filetypes.

KING 1-UP SALESMAN · 06-12-2008, 03:42 PM

Okay. I won't do green text anymore.[IMG]

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Okay, how did Dark Zero get it so big?

Dr. Zero · 06-12-2008, 03:43 PM

*sigh* Here's a rescaled version:

OK, now I'll add my thoughts.

1. Try to avoid blank space at all costs. It really doesn't look good.
2. I'm glad that you decided to use textboxes, but they could be assembled better. Try using the rounded rectangle tool (if you're using MSpaint, it's on the bottom-right of the toolbox).
3. The Luigi sprite looks rather slender. Try to stretch it in multiples of 100.
4. Also, the hand-drawn sprite isn't very good. It looks like you put effort into it, and that's good, but there's white space in it and the pose looks akward.

That's all I see wrong with it, visually.

KING 1-UP SALESMAN · 06-12-2008, 03:45 PM

How do you get it full size? I just tried to, but I couldn't figure it out.

Dr. Zero · 06-12-2008, 03:50 PM

Instead of clicking "Properties" on the image, hit "Copy Shortcut".

KING 1-UP SALESMAN · 06-12-2008, 04:49 PM

I never even did that before. I did copy on the picture, and clicked on insert image. It wouldn't let me paste.

Okay I'm going to try again now but it probably won't work.

Sweet it did. Thanks.

By the way, that hand-drawn sprite I have in this issue is named Punk Dude.

I don't know what happened, but something messed up, so I'll make another comic to show what happened in the other panels

Tazy_10 · 06-12-2008, 05:00 PM

PISTOL BEAM GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO.

<_>;

**Dylan** · 06-12-2008, 05:06 PM

Seriously? Are you being serious right now? Did you read the rule involving effort?

Mush Man · 06-12-2008, 05:06 PM

KING 1-UP SALESMAN · 06-12-2008, 05:12 PM

At least for all of you critics there is one good thing about this comic: PEACH IS DEAD

i thot u wer my frend · 06-12-2008, 07:10 PM

No, that is not good at all. Peach is awesome. Maybe Daisy, but Peach dying is nothing awesome at all. Maybe if it's ShadowPrincess15 fanfic Peach (a character none of you comic forum lurkers will know, but trust me, it's horrid,) it would be okay, but this is not special at all.

No effort has been put into a comic that has been done sooo many times before.

Dr. Zero · 06-12-2008, 07:18 PM

^You're thinking of Princess Toadstool. That's like Peach, but back when she was awesome.

LuWEEGEEman · 06-12-2008, 08:11 PM

uh.... ok? *to 1up's comic*

Metal Man · 06-12-2008, 08:42 PM

... I have only one response.

06-12-2008, 02:47 PM	#1
KING 1-UP SALESMAN Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: I'm sitting in the corner ashamed. Gender: Posts: 1,351 Thanks: 292 Thanked 40 Times in 30 Posts Blog Entries: 6 Points: 9,954.89 Bank: 0.01 Total Points: 9,954.90 Donate	Luigi's evil plan (It'll work now.) [IMG][/IMG] Oops wrong pic I'll post the right one now[IMG]URL=http://www.slide.com/s/nO1T_Uzk1T8GpZ2aFlvNKX6K8-h3kzE4?referrer=hlnk][/url][/IMG] [IMG][/IMG]Let me make it bigger Okay.. next comic I'll make the text bigger. Just tell me if you can't read the text and I'll post the dialogue. Last edited by 1-up salesman; 06-12-2008 at 02:47 PM. Reason: Automerged Doublepost

06-12-2008, 02:56 PM	#3
KING 1-UP SALESMAN Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: I'm sitting in the corner ashamed. Gender: Posts: 1,351 Thanks: 292 Thanked 40 Times in 30 Posts Blog Entries: 6 Points: 9,954.89 Bank: 0.01 Total Points: 9,954.90 Donate	Oh..so I don't have to do the insert image.. Here's dialogue: Luigi:For years now.... (next panel) Luigi:Mario has taken all the fame.... (next panel) Luigi:And I have only gotten two games.... (next panel) Luigi:..which were no good....but now...Mario shall pay!!! (next panel) Luigi:......... Mario:Who are you talking to, Luigi? Last edited by 1-up salesman; 06-12-2008 at 02:56 PM. Reason: Automerged Doublepost

06-12-2008, 03:37 PM	#7
*Ace Mercury* Marshmallow Knight ☆ Supermod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Southern Ontario Gender: Posts: 18,997 Thanks: 364 Thanked 1,533 Times in 793 Posts Blog Entries: 1 Points: 103,035.07 Bank: 15,171,716.36 Total Points: 15,274,751.43 Donate	I have issues with your comic, which will no doubt deter everyone from reading it: Panels are empty and have badly scaled sprites. With sprites, you want to make sure that you're not just scaling it freehand, and also avoid embarrassing gaffs like having a backwards "L" on Luigi's hat. The text is hard to read, especially Luigi's light green on white text. It is too small and otherwise illegible. They're BMP files, which are enormous. You want to use GIF or PNG for sprite comics - if you're using MSPaint, you can do a "Save as..." and choose one of those filetypes.

06-12-2008, 03:42 PM	#8
KING 1-UP SALESMAN Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: I'm sitting in the corner ashamed. Gender: Posts: 1,351 Thanks: 292 Thanked 40 Times in 30 Posts Blog Entries: 6 Points: 9,954.89 Bank: 0.01 Total Points: 9,954.90 Donate	Okay. I won't do green text anymore.[IMG][/IMG] Okay, how did Dark Zero get it so big? Last edited by 1-up salesman; 06-12-2008 at 03:42 PM. Reason: Automerged Doublepost

06-12-2008, 03:43 PM	#9
Dr. Zero Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: My false memories. Gender: Posts: 2,690 Thanks: 232 Thanked 127 Times in 94 Posts Points: 7,146.27 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 7,146.27 Donate	sigh Here's a rescaled version: OK, now I'll add my thoughts. 1. Try to avoid blank space at all costs. It really doesn't look good. 2. I'm glad that you decided to use textboxes, but they could be assembled better. Try using the rounded rectangle tool (if you're using MSpaint, it's on the bottom-right of the toolbox). 3. The Luigi sprite looks rather slender. Try to stretch it in multiples of 100. 4. Also, the hand-drawn sprite isn't very good. It looks like you put effort into it, and that's good, but there's white space in it and the pose looks akward. That's all I see wrong with it, visually. Last edited by DarkZero; 06-12-2008 at 03:49 PM.

06-12-2008, 02:49 PM	#2
Mush Man Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: Trekkin' Gender: Posts: 3,919 Thanks: 163 Thanked 178 Times in 139 Posts Points: 2,029.16 Bank: 8,167.50 Total Points: 10,196.66 Donate	all I can read is "who are you talking to Luigi" BTW all you have to do to post a picture is copy it from host site and paste it here.

06-12-2008, 03:03 PM	#4
Dr. Zero Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: My false memories. Gender: Posts: 2,690 Thanks: 232 Thanked 127 Times in 94 Posts Points: 7,146.27 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 7,146.27 Donate	http://item.slide.com/r/1/103/i/HNmX...5ANUjVkrv4BWV/ There ya go. I put the first picture in as a link because it's enormous.

06-12-2008, 03:07 PM	#5
Mush Man Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: Trekkin' Gender: Posts: 3,919 Thanks: 163 Thanked 178 Times in 139 Posts Points: 2,029.16 Bank: 8,167.50 Total Points: 10,196.66 Donate	edit: forget it.

06-12-2008, 03:20 PM	#6
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06-12-2008, 03:45 PM	#10
KING 1-UP SALESMAN Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: I'm sitting in the corner ashamed. Gender: Posts: 1,351 Thanks: 292 Thanked 40 Times in 30 Posts Blog Entries: 6 Points: 9,954.89 Bank: 0.01 Total Points: 9,954.90 Donate	How do you get it full size? I just tried to, but I couldn't figure it out.

06-12-2008, 03:50 PM	#11
Dr. Zero Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: My false memories. Gender: Posts: 2,690 Thanks: 232 Thanked 127 Times in 94 Posts Points: 7,146.27 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 7,146.27 Donate	Instead of clicking "Properties" on the image, hit "Copy Shortcut".

06-12-2008, 04:49 PM	#12
KING 1-UP SALESMAN Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: I'm sitting in the corner ashamed. Gender: Posts: 1,351 Thanks: 292 Thanked 40 Times in 30 Posts Blog Entries: 6 Points: 9,954.89 Bank: 0.01 Total Points: 9,954.90 Donate	I never even did that before. I did copy on the picture, and clicked on insert image. It wouldn't let me paste. Okay I'm going to try again now but it probably won't work. Sweet it did. Thanks. By the way, that hand-drawn sprite I have in this issue is named Punk Dude. I don't know what happened, but something messed up, so I'll make another comic to show what happened in the other panels Last edited by 1-up salesman; 06-12-2008 at 04:49 PM. Reason: Automerged Doublepost

06-12-2008, 05:00 PM	#13
Tazy_10 Forum Host Join Date: Sep 2000 Location: Soul Calibur needs no Guest Characters Gender: Posts: 8,133 Thanks: 178 Thanked 380 Times in 298 Posts Blog Entries: 6 Points: 26,314.08 Bank: 34,486.27 Total Points: 60,800.35 Donate	I'm very sorry for this PISTOL BEAM GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO. <_>;

06-12-2008, 05:06 PM	#14
Dylan Banned Mod Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Teenage Wasteland Gender: Posts: 6,280 Thanks: 951 Thanked 944 Times in 435 Posts Points: 32,789.76 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 32,789.77 Donate	Seriously? Are you being serious right now? Did you read the rule involving effort?

06-12-2008, 05:12 PM	#16
KING 1-UP SALESMAN Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: I'm sitting in the corner ashamed. Gender: Posts: 1,351 Thanks: 292 Thanked 40 Times in 30 Posts Blog Entries: 6 Points: 9,954.89 Bank: 0.01 Total Points: 9,954.90 Donate	At least for all of you critics there is one good thing about this comic: PEACH IS DEAD

06-12-2008, 07:10 PM	#17
i thot u wer my frend WHAT KILLED THE DINOSAURS? THE ICE AGE! Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Planet Michigan Gender: Posts: 11,480 Thanks: 515 Thanked 897 Times in 629 Posts Blog Entries: 13 Points: 717.14 Bank: 29,302.91 Total Points: 30,020.05 Donate	No, that is not good at all. Peach is awesome. Maybe Daisy, but Peach dying is nothing awesome at all. Maybe if it's ShadowPrincess15 fanfic Peach (a character none of you comic forum lurkers will know, but trust me, it's horrid,) it would be okay, but this is not special at all. No effort has been put into a comic that has been done sooo many times before.

06-12-2008, 07:18 PM	#18
Dr. Zero Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: My false memories. Gender: Posts: 2,690 Thanks: 232 Thanked 127 Times in 94 Posts Points: 7,146.27 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 7,146.27 Donate	^You're thinking of Princess Toadstool. That's like Peach, but back when she was awesome.

06-12-2008, 08:11 PM	#19
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06-12-2008, 08:42 PM	#20
Metal Man Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2000 Location: Gender: Posts: 6,747 Thanks: 74 Thanked 199 Times in 137 Posts Points: 10,105.63 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 10,105.63 Donate	... I have only one response.