the ongoing story(anyone can join in whenever they want.)

1-up Salesman · 05-15-2008, 06:16 PM

alright this is a story topic.this takes place where all the video games are different universes, but they are all linked.kind of like kingdom hearts. so a videogame character may pop up sometime in the story. i'll start out the story. i call it:the unknown temple. it's about this guy who's a god, living in this temple that's in the void between universes. the temple has no end. it's in infinite size. the god summons warriors to his temple, where they are forced to venture through and complete the missions that he gives them or they will be erased from the world.(like the game the world ends with you.) now to start the story. Rael's eyes widened.He wasn't at his house. He was surrounded by paintings of the world's end, and plenty of gothic paintings."Where am I?!" he said aloud.He heard a ring on his cell phone. He opened it, and found a message saying:"Get to the library before you are found by them." Who did it mean by "them?" Rael didn't know, but he was sure that they were trouble.But he had no idea how he was going to get to the library. He didn't even know where he was. Rael left the room, and hurried down a hallway. Rael opened a door, and found an empty room except for three paintings.Rael stared at the portraits.There was a loud hissing noise. A creature came out of each portrait, each with long claws.Rael unsheathed his sword. Rael stabbed into the first, slaying it.The next jumped on his back, scratching with incredible force. Rael yelled in pain.He threw it off his back, and slashed down with his sword. He killed the next with his elemental rod, striking it with lightning. his enemies dead, rael left the room and proceeded through the hallway.he came upon a large door, which he opened.he found himself in a huge room filled with book shelves and books of all kinds.he had found the library. "welcome, adventurer. you have made it to the library.your first mission is complete.but more difficult missions await,"said a voice. "more missions?! who are you, and what am i doing here?!"yelled rael. "you are the first in the game that i call journey for survival.you must complete the mission that i give you, or you will be killed. i will not reveal my true identity, but you may call me the controller,"said the voice. Everything turned black before Rael could react.Rael woke up back in the library.his phone rang.he read a new message saying:find and defeat the first challenger or face death. Rael was going to have to complete the missions if he wanted to survive. alright, it's started. now if any of you join in, you run into Rael and join forces with him.

SephirothKirby · 05-15-2008, 06:46 PM

Holy ****, learn what the Enter key is.

The Willful Wanderer · 05-15-2008, 07:14 PM

PROTIP: My eyes are bleeding.

Metal Man · 05-15-2008, 09:59 PM

You're making me want to enter the battle of the Links topic just to stab you.

Repster · 05-16-2008, 06:08 PM

You really have not entered any form what so ever for joining. Sure you've got the "god" figure taking people and giving them random quests for his amusement, but what exactly what does that entail for those yet to be summoned? Without the crucial details of the nature of the joining, said joining cannot be done. Therefore, Rael is doomed to fail and die, and that's just sad...

Also, I am in agreement to all others previous in mentioned you reallllly need to separate that thing so it can actually be read without inducing pain.

Robotazy · 05-16-2008, 06:13 PM

I'm not reading that unless Spaces are there to separate the mountains of text.

1-up Salesman · 05-17-2008, 09:53 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by repster

You really have not entered any form what so ever for joining. Sure you've got the "god" figure taking people and giving them random quests for his amusement, but what exactly what does that entail for those yet to be summoned? Without the crucial details of the nature of the joining, said joining cannot be done. Therefore, Rael is doomed to fail and die, and that's just sad...

Also, I am in agreement to all others previous in mentioned you reallllly need to separate that thing so it can actually be read without inducing pain.

well, you'll find out why the "god" is summoning these people soon.that is, if some one joins.

Vapor · 05-17-2008, 12:01 PM

^People probably want to know that before they join. And in the Gunjin, proper grammar and paragraph seperation will bring you far.

Repster · 05-17-2008, 02:39 PM

The why is of no consequence to me, nor the who for that matter. Those are things that will come later. I am interested in the how, what, where and when.

How are they summoned? Magic teleportation? Mysterious portal below them? Star trek like sciency technobable?

When are they summoned? Before, after, during the same time as Rael?

What happens after they're summoned. What does mister BBEG ask of them? What state do the arrive?

Where do they arrive? Where do they go?

How do they know where to go?

So on, and so forth.

Also, if you want people to join, go back and edit. You've had 6 complaints about the lack of spacing. Spacing is a part of punctuation, which is very, very, VERY important.

1-up Salesman · 05-17-2008, 10:42 PM

the "god" teleported warriors to his castle. he summoned them at,......................um.........well..why does it really matter? i guess the current time,or just the normal time whenever regular gunjin battles take place.

05-15-2008, 06:16 PM	#1
1-up Salesman Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Letting you guys know that I'm planning on continuing Attack of the Spammers soon. Gender: Posts: 4,095 Thanks: 2,162 Thanked 250 Times in 194 Posts Blog Entries: 9	the ongoing story(anyone can join in whenever they want.) alright this is a story topic.this takes place where all the video games are different universes, but they are all linked.kind of like kingdom hearts. so a videogame character may pop up sometime in the story. i'll start out the story. i call it:the unknown temple. it's about this guy who's a god, living in this temple that's in the void between universes. the temple has no end. it's in infinite size. the god summons warriors to his temple, where they are forced to venture through and complete the missions that he gives them or they will be erased from the world.(like the game the world ends with you.) now to start the story. Rael's eyes widened.He wasn't at his house. He was surrounded by paintings of the world's end, and plenty of gothic paintings."Where am I?!" he said aloud.He heard a ring on his cell phone. He opened it, and found a message saying:"Get to the library before you are found by them." Who did it mean by "them?" Rael didn't know, but he was sure that they were trouble.But he had no idea how he was going to get to the library. He didn't even know where he was. Rael left the room, and hurried down a hallway. Rael opened a door, and found an empty room except for three paintings.Rael stared at the portraits.There was a loud hissing noise. A creature came out of each portrait, each with long claws.Rael unsheathed his sword. Rael stabbed into the first, slaying it.The next jumped on his back, scratching with incredible force. Rael yelled in pain.He threw it off his back, and slashed down with his sword. He killed the next with his elemental rod, striking it with lightning. his enemies dead, rael left the room and proceeded through the hallway.he came upon a large door, which he opened.he found himself in a huge room filled with book shelves and books of all kinds.he had found the library. "welcome, adventurer. you have made it to the library.your first mission is complete.but more difficult missions await,"said a voice. "more missions?! who are you, and what am i doing here?!"yelled rael. "you are the first in the game that i call journey for survival.you must complete the mission that i give you, or you will be killed. i will not reveal my true identity, but you may call me the controller,"said the voice. Everything turned black before Rael could react.Rael woke up back in the library.his phone rang.he read a new message saying:find and defeat the first challenger or face death. Rael was going to have to complete the missions if he wanted to survive. alright, it's started. now if any of you join in, you run into Rael and join forces with him.

05-15-2008, 07:14 PM	#3
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05-15-2008, 06:46 PM	#2
SephirothKirby Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Those who criticize our generation forget who raised it. Gender: Posts: 7,213 Thanks: 373 Thanked 760 Times in 447 Posts	Holy ****, learn what the Enter key is.

05-15-2008, 09:59 PM	#4
Metal Man Fairy-Slaying Maniac Join Date: Apr 2000 Location: 1592 Miles Away From Here Gender: Posts: 18,062 Thanks: 148 Thanked 683 Times in 482 Posts	You're making me want to enter the battle of the Links topic just to stab you.

05-16-2008, 06:08 PM	#5
Repster Gunjin Mod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: J'tun ostie d'Acadien. Gender: Posts: 6,130 Thanks: 2 Thanked 37 Times in 25 Posts	You really have not entered any form what so ever for joining. Sure you've got the "god" figure taking people and giving them random quests for his amusement, but what exactly what does that entail for those yet to be summoned? Without the crucial details of the nature of the joining, said joining cannot be done. Therefore, Rael is doomed to fail and die, and that's just sad... Also, I am in agreement to all others previous in mentioned you reallllly need to separate that thing so it can actually be read without inducing pain.

05-16-2008, 06:13 PM	#6
Robotazy PRESS ANY KEY TO PANIC! Join Date: Sep 2000 Location: A Tiny Shed Gender: Posts: 16,483 Thanks: 529 Thanked 1,254 Times in 897 Posts Blog Entries: 46	I'm not reading that unless Spaces are there to separate the mountains of text.

05-17-2008, 12:01 PM	#8
Vapor Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: WHERE IT'S AT Gender: Posts: 5,211 Thanks: 314 Thanked 413 Times in 249 Posts	^People probably want to know that before they join. And in the Gunjin, proper grammar and paragraph seperation will bring you far.

05-17-2008, 02:39 PM	#9
Repster Gunjin Mod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: J'tun ostie d'Acadien. Gender: Posts: 6,130 Thanks: 2 Thanked 37 Times in 25 Posts	The why is of no consequence to me, nor the who for that matter. Those are things that will come later. I am interested in the how, what, where and when. How are they summoned? Magic teleportation? Mysterious portal below them? Star trek like sciency technobable? When are they summoned? Before, after, during the same time as Rael? What happens after they're summoned. What does mister BBEG ask of them? What state do the arrive? Where do they arrive? Where do they go? How do they know where to go? So on, and so forth. Also, if you want people to join, go back and edit. You've had 6 complaints about the lack of spacing. Spacing is a part of punctuation, which is very, very, VERY important.

05-17-2008, 10:42 PM	#10
1-up Salesman Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Letting you guys know that I'm planning on continuing Attack of the Spammers soon. Gender: Posts: 4,095 Thanks: 2,162 Thanked 250 Times in 194 Posts Blog Entries: 9	the "god" teleported warriors to his castle. he summoned them at,......................um.........well..why does it really matter? i guess the current time,or just the normal time whenever regular gunjin battles take place.