Metal Man's EXTREME Presidential Adventure - New NC Series - Part 1 Up

Metal Man · 01-17-2010, 08:31 PM

Part 1 is here!

This is my first attempt at a storyline thing, and of course, it has just begun, so, the best is yet to come, but here's my first part.

In any case, as you can see, I will be able to keep NC updated.

DarkZero · 01-17-2010, 08:36 PM

Your new nickname should be Tldr.

But otherwise, I like it so far. I like activity.

Redshirt · 01-17-2010, 08:38 PM

Great comic. Still hating on Wario I see, not I care annymoe after he fired me...

BTW: did you get the sprite sheet I sent you? I know you like to space out updates, just wana make sure you got it.

Metal Man · 01-17-2010, 08:46 PM

Yeah, I did.

And yeah, as you can see, my tendency for long sentences is quite silly.

I'll try and cut down on the long sentences for the non-Metal Man characters, but figured you'd guys prefer a handful of panels with long sentences so you can see the introduction now, rather than later. Then as the comic develops, I can figure out the right word-panel ratio for the other characters.

Gabriel · 01-18-2010, 12:09 AM

I'm liking how it looks so far. My favorite part has to be when Spoiler Below

Steve, after so many years, finally escapes that Extra-move prison thing, and how he's now bent on revenge. He might even just forget his name and go with Silence for a while. It's a kinda cool super villain name

. One suggestion I have is to make a list of Presidential Promises you have, just so I...er, uh THESE SIMPLETONS SURROUNDING US can follow along with what's going on.

Also, I didn't get that pun you wanted to kill me over.

Metal Man · 01-18-2010, 12:20 AM

Actually, me neither. I must have forgot to put it in there.

Not to worry, I'll point that out in the next episode.

Also, yer spoiler tags are not working, Gabe.

I forget what activates them.

Gabriel · 01-18-2010, 12:30 AM

^In fact I had misspelled the key, it should be singular, not plural. I made to fix the error, but I took so long you had time to post...haha.

Metal Man · 01-18-2010, 12:44 AM

Yeah, heh.

In any case, this seems to be a success, I will probably have another chapter by next month or so.

**Perrin Aybara** · 01-18-2010, 12:52 AM

Heh, that's funny, since for the longest of time I was planning on writing Bill and Fred 2: Spoiler Below

The Revenge of Silence.

Creepy.

I was also planning on having a subplot in that story with Dr. Donez vs. Dr. Pepper.

-jay

Gabriel · 01-18-2010, 01:13 AM

What could have been...sigh.

At least you're a lot more active around the forums now.

Metal Man · 01-18-2010, 05:38 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Perrin Aybara

Heh, that's funny, since for the longest of time I was planning on writing Bill and Fred 2: Spoiler Below

The Revenge of Silence.

Creepy.

I was also planning on having a subplot in that story with Dr. Donez vs. Dr. Pepper.

-jay

You won't be disappointed, as it seems I have read your mind.

Yes. Even on the second thing. Just with a different character than Dr. Donez.

You'll see.

Invalid Username · 01-18-2010, 10:54 AM

WHAT A WACKY ADVENTURE

Looks good so far. Can't wait to see more and all that gibberish.

MeowMan · 01-18-2010, 06:16 PM

Ooh, fun, giberish..

Redshirt · 01-18-2010, 06:19 PM

I wish I could work on the deathmatch.

Romplayer · 01-19-2010, 08:24 AM

Why do you have to put yourself in every short or comic or anything you create?

Black Belt Tazy · 01-19-2010, 09:31 AM

Jay did that.

Redshirt · 01-19-2010, 11:11 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Romplayer

Why do you have to put yourself in every short or comic or anything you create?

He is the President of NC, so he would appear in NC comixs

Metal Man · 01-19-2010, 12:10 PM

Well, I don't HAVE to, but when I'm just starting out, it's a lot easier to use myself to get the ball rolling and then pick up speed and switch to more panels of the other characters.

Also, Codiekitty had no problem using herself endlessly in panels, and the Bill and Fred story had Jay appearing constantly.

Of course, it makes sense you'd ask, since no comic with that type of self-character use has occurred since I think Mario Busters.

Romplayer · 01-19-2010, 07:38 PM

Okay, I have to admit Jay did that too, even in multiple forms (Respo etc). But somehow I just think that this belongs to NC because... it was in NC comix since ever and... it's JAY!

Not very convincing, I know... so I just keep my mouth shut.
I just have the feeling, that the character (!) Metal Man is a bit over-present lately.

Apart from that: I like that you start a story by reactivating a character from one of the classics and so in some kind continuing the old plot.

01-17-2010, 08:31 PM	#1
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01-17-2010, 08:38 PM	#3
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01-18-2010, 12:09 AM	#5
Gabriel Member Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Anyone up for a little double entendre? Gender: Posts: 742 Thanks: 45 Thanked 44 Times in 33 Posts Points: 1,262.32 Bank: 25,943.80 Total Points: 27,206.12 Donate	I'm liking how it looks so far. My favorite part has to be when Spoiler Below Steve, after so many years, finally escapes that Extra-move prison thing, and how he's now bent on revenge. He might even just forget his name and go with Silence for a while. It's a kinda cool super villain name . One suggestion I have is to make a list of Presidential Promises you have, just so I...er, uh THESE SIMPLETONS SURROUNDING US can follow along with what's going on. Also, I didn't get that pun you wanted to kill me over. Last edited by Gabriel Rodriguez; 01-18-2010 at 12:29 AM.

01-17-2010, 08:36 PM	#2
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01-17-2010, 08:46 PM	#4
Metal Man Cheapskate Join Date: Apr 2000 Location: Shane is the king of Monopoly! Gender: Posts: 13,793 Thanks: 125 Thanked 600 Times in 421 Posts Points: 5,160.49 Bank: 140,079.05 Total Points: 145,239.54 Donate	Yeah, I did. And yeah, as you can see, my tendency for long sentences is quite silly. I'll try and cut down on the long sentences for the non-Metal Man characters, but figured you'd guys prefer a handful of panels with long sentences so you can see the introduction now, rather than later. Then as the comic develops, I can figure out the right word-panel ratio for the other characters.

01-18-2010, 12:20 AM	#6
Metal Man Cheapskate Join Date: Apr 2000 Location: Shane is the king of Monopoly! Gender: Posts: 13,793 Thanks: 125 Thanked 600 Times in 421 Posts Points: 5,160.49 Bank: 140,079.05 Total Points: 145,239.54 Donate	Actually, me neither. I must have forgot to put it in there. Not to worry, I'll point that out in the next episode. Also, yer spoiler tags are not working, Gabe. I forget what activates them.

01-18-2010, 12:30 AM	#7
Gabriel Member Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Anyone up for a little double entendre? Gender: Posts: 742 Thanks: 45 Thanked 44 Times in 33 Posts Points: 1,262.32 Bank: 25,943.80 Total Points: 27,206.12 Donate	^In fact I had misspelled the key, it should be singular, not plural. I made to fix the error, but I took so long you had time to post...haha.

01-18-2010, 12:44 AM	#8
Metal Man Cheapskate Join Date: Apr 2000 Location: Shane is the king of Monopoly! Gender: Posts: 13,793 Thanks: 125 Thanked 600 Times in 421 Posts Points: 5,160.49 Bank: 140,079.05 Total Points: 145,239.54 Donate	Yeah, heh. In any case, this seems to be a success, I will probably have another chapter by next month or so.

01-18-2010, 12:52 AM	#9
Perrin Aybara LLLUUUCCCCCCAAA!!! Join Date: Apr 1999 Location: Alone....so terribly alone... Some... where... out... there... dies Gender: Posts: 12,044 Thanks: 194 Thanked 503 Times in 234 Posts Points: 85,476.78 Bank: 847,449.65 Total Points: 932,926.44 Donate	Heh, that's funny, since for the longest of time I was planning on writing Bill and Fred 2: Spoiler Below The Revenge of Silence. Creepy. I was also planning on having a subplot in that story with Dr. Donez vs. Dr. Pepper. -jay

01-18-2010, 01:13 AM	#10
Gabriel Member Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Anyone up for a little double entendre? Gender: Posts: 742 Thanks: 45 Thanked 44 Times in 33 Posts Points: 1,262.32 Bank: 25,943.80 Total Points: 27,206.12 Donate	What could have been...sigh. At least you're a lot more active around the forums now.

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Romplayer Member Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Germany Gender: Posts: 787 Thanks: 1 Thanked 10 Times in 7 Posts Points: 9,919.99 Bank: 10,979.86 Total Points: 20,899.85 Donate	Why do you have to put yourself in every short or comic or anything you create?

01-19-2010, 12:10 PM	#18
Metal Man Cheapskate Join Date: Apr 2000 Location: Shane is the king of Monopoly! Gender: Posts: 13,793 Thanks: 125 Thanked 600 Times in 421 Posts Points: 5,160.49 Bank: 140,079.05 Total Points: 145,239.54 Donate	Well, I don't HAVE to, but when I'm just starting out, it's a lot easier to use myself to get the ball rolling and then pick up speed and switch to more panels of the other characters. Also, Codiekitty had no problem using herself endlessly in panels, and the Bill and Fred story had Jay appearing constantly. Of course, it makes sense you'd ask, since no comic with that type of self-character use has occurred since I think Mario Busters.

01-19-2010, 07:38 PM	#19
Romplayer Member Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Germany Gender: Posts: 787 Thanks: 1 Thanked 10 Times in 7 Posts Points: 9,919.99 Bank: 10,979.86 Total Points: 20,899.85 Donate	Okay, I have to admit Jay did that too, even in multiple forms (Respo etc). But somehow I just think that this belongs to NC because... it was in NC comix since ever and... it's JAY! Not very convincing, I know... so I just keep my mouth shut. I just have the feeling, that the character (!) Metal Man is a bit over-present lately. Apart from that: I like that you start a story by reactivating a character from one of the classics and so in some kind continuing the old plot.