My first Comic

Frumie · 04-24-2006, 02:48 PM

I have made a comic. It's basically an intro to what could probably be a series.

[img=http://img278.imageshack.us/img278/392/green13qc.png]

Frumie · 04-25-2006, 09:58 PM

Hello, any comments?

***Ace Mercury*** · 04-25-2006, 11:39 PM

I'll drop some comments.

There's a narrative style going on. There's some lame jokes, like where some character says something, the other characters react with horror, and then it turns out to be not true. There's also the joke where it looks like the comic author is running out of steam midway through making the comic ("Well, that sucked."), which fails to 'wow' me. The crack about Malt Shoppes was decent, though, although you didn't need to mention it was beside that guy's house.

There's frames where action happens, like when CN's head falls from the sky; these scenes are boring, and do not add much to the humour. The characters are 'bleh', without any real substance to them. I realize they are sprites, but they take up far too small a space for the frame size; this distances them from us (and the action) and makes for uninteresting graphics. Compare with other popular (sprite?) webcomics, where characters take up much of the frame and are more in-your-face.

The background is completely white, which is kind of disappointing. Awkwardly, you use a coloured-font against it, which makes it kind of hard to read; darker colours would work better against white. The text is sloppy: lines cross through text and text is not aligned properly. The idea to give each character a different colour is a nice one, but you use similar colours which makes it hard to remember (we're not studying your comic for an exam, we're glossing it over to get to the funny parts).

There are some nagging things: the left-most 'action' line on CN's head remains even though it's on the ground, there are grammar mistakes ("Those still exists?"), and, yes, I hate using the action lines to denote movement.

On the techincal side, I noticed you used PNG format for your comic. Yes, this is normally a good format for sprite comics, because it is normally lossless, but for some reason text is blurry, yet jagged artifacts remain on CN's head. I'm not too familiar with PNG, but it looks like you've used dithering (unintentionally?) on it, which ruins the point of using a nice, clean PNG. If you're interested, you can read up more about image formats from Google (BFF!) or check this link.

Dylan · 04-26-2006, 01:38 PM

^ About the PNG thing: A lot of spriters, including myself, prefer not to make comics in a program which suports the PNG format because it's a little tougher. Instead, the comic is made and saved on Paint, then reopened and saved as a PNG. He probably saved it as a JPG before reopening and saving it as a PNG.

~Dylan

***Ace Mercury*** · 04-26-2006, 01:57 PM

Ouch. All of blurriness of a JPEG with the filesize of a PNG.

**Crazyswordsman** · 04-26-2006, 04:35 PM

I actually use PNGs for shorts. For longer comix, I have a nifty GIF converter. -CSM

585 · 04-26-2006, 07:25 PM

I liked it. It was like one of those short shows on T.V. good work.

Frumie · 04-27-2006, 08:53 PM

By the way, It wasn't supposed to be that funny. If I make more, they'll get better.

Alink - VCR Man. VCR. · 05-16-2006, 06:09 PM

Woah! I remember all of you guys!

WOAH!

Anyways. Remember, Jpg's are Baaaaad.

Here's a way to remember:

J - J(silent)crap
P - Poop
G - Grandma

And you don't want to change grandma's diaper, eh? EH? So I suggest you don't use them.

Bahahahahahha!

***Ace Mercury*** · 05-16-2006, 09:13 PM

Um... that's not helping. Plus JPEGs rocks your box.

Alink - VCR Man. VCR. · 05-22-2006, 01:31 PM

^ Das how I remember to not use 'em, dude.

chad120 · 06-08-2006, 06:59 PM

haaha chuck norris

Lonewolfe · 06-19-2006, 01:42 AM

That is pretty good.

MC Luigi · 06-20-2006, 09:34 AM

I don't like them much....it was okay.

Seeking Attention · 07-19-2006, 01:58 PM

I thought the comic was good but not great but not bad but not horrifingly terrible but not the best but not...

ah you get the picture.Just put more effort in or we'll hear those characters talk about the comic and all they are going to say about it is well that sucked.

04-24-2006, 02:48 PM	#1
Frumie Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Planet X Gender: Posts: 3,926 Thanks: 310 Thanked 221 Times in 147 Posts	My first Comic I have made a comic. It's basically an intro to what could probably be a series. [img=http://img278.imageshack.us/img278/392/green13qc.png]

04-25-2006, 11:39 PM	#3
*Ace Mercury* Marshmallow Knight ☆ Supermod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Southern Ontario Gender: Posts: 23,274 Thanks: 568 Thanked 3,297 Times in 1,582 Posts Blog Entries: 1	I like talking. I'll drop some comments. There's a narrative style going on. There's some lame jokes, like where some character says something, the other characters react with horror, and then it turns out to be not true. There's also the joke where it looks like the comic author is running out of steam midway through making the comic ("Well, that sucked."), which fails to 'wow' me. The crack about Malt Shoppes was decent, though, although you didn't need to mention it was beside that guy's house. There's frames where action happens, like when CN's head falls from the sky; these scenes are boring, and do not add much to the humour. The characters are 'bleh', without any real substance to them. I realize they are sprites, but they take up far too small a space for the frame size; this distances them from us (and the action) and makes for uninteresting graphics. Compare with other popular (sprite?) webcomics, where characters take up much of the frame and are more in-your-face. The background is completely white, which is kind of disappointing. Awkwardly, you use a coloured-font against it, which makes it kind of hard to read; darker colours would work better against white. The text is sloppy: lines cross through text and text is not aligned properly. The idea to give each character a different colour is a nice one, but you use similar colours which makes it hard to remember (we're not studying your comic for an exam, we're glossing it over to get to the funny parts). There are some nagging things: the left-most 'action' line on CN's head remains even though it's on the ground, there are grammar mistakes ("Those still exists?"), and, yes, I hate using the action lines to denote movement. On the techincal side, I noticed you used PNG format for your comic. Yes, this is normally a good format for sprite comics, because it is normally lossless, but for some reason text is blurry, yet jagged artifacts remain on CN's head. I'm not too familiar with PNG, but it looks like you've used dithering (unintentionally?) on it, which ruins the point of using a nice, clean PNG. If you're interested, you can read up more about image formats from Google (BFF!) or check this link.

04-25-2006, 09:58 PM	#2
Frumie Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Planet X Gender: Posts: 3,926 Thanks: 310 Thanked 221 Times in 147 Posts	Hello, any comments?

04-26-2006, 01:38 PM	#4
Dylan Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Teenage Wasteland Gender: Posts: 7,790 Thanks: 1,632 Thanked 1,816 Times in 773 Posts	^ About the PNG thing: A lot of spriters, including myself, prefer not to make comics in a program which suports the PNG format because it's a little tougher. Instead, the comic is made and saved on Paint, then reopened and saved as a PNG. He probably saved it as a JPG before reopening and saving it as a PNG. ~Dylan

04-26-2006, 01:57 PM	#5
*Ace Mercury* Marshmallow Knight ☆ Supermod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Southern Ontario Gender: Posts: 23,274 Thanks: 568 Thanked 3,297 Times in 1,582 Posts Blog Entries: 1	Ouch. All of blurriness of a JPEG with the filesize of a PNG.

04-26-2006, 04:35 PM	#6
Crazyswordsman This key doesn't work. Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Booyaville (yeah!) Gender: Posts: 10,791 Thanks: 1,019 Thanked 686 Times in 467 Posts	I actually use PNGs for shorts. For longer comix, I have a nifty GIF converter. -CSM

04-26-2006, 07:25 PM	#7
585 Newbie Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Rochester, NY Gender: Posts: 10 Thanks: 1 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	I liked it. It was like one of those short shows on T.V. good work.

04-27-2006, 08:53 PM	#8
Frumie Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Planet X Gender: Posts: 3,926 Thanks: 310 Thanked 221 Times in 147 Posts	By the way, It wasn't supposed to be that funny. If I make more, they'll get better.

05-16-2006, 06:09 PM	#9
Alink - VCR Man. VCR. Member Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: Behind The Wall Of Sleep. Gender: Posts: 768 Thanks: 2 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Woah! I remember all of you guys! WOAH! Anyways. Remember, Jpg's are Baaaaad. Here's a way to remember: J - J(silent)crap P - Poop G - Grandma And you don't want to change grandma's diaper, eh? EH? So I suggest you don't use them. Bahahahahahha!

05-16-2006, 09:13 PM	#10
*Ace Mercury* Marshmallow Knight ☆ Supermod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Southern Ontario Gender: Posts: 23,274 Thanks: 568 Thanked 3,297 Times in 1,582 Posts Blog Entries: 1	Um... that's not helping. Plus JPEGs rocks your box.

05-22-2006, 01:31 PM	#11
Alink - VCR Man. VCR. Member Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: Behind The Wall Of Sleep. Gender: Posts: 768 Thanks: 2 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	^ Das how I remember to not use 'em, dude.

06-08-2006, 06:59 PM	#12
chad120 Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: texas Gender: Posts: 30 Thanks: 3 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	haaha chuck norris

06-19-2006, 01:42 AM	#13
Lonewolfe Newbie Join Date: Jun 2006 Gender: Posts: 4 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	That is pretty good.

06-20-2006, 09:34 AM	#14
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 15 Times in 15 Posts	I don't like them much....it was okay.

07-19-2006, 01:58 PM	#15
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	I thought the comic was good but not great but not bad but not horrifingly terrible but not the best but not... ah you get the picture.Just put more effort in or we'll hear those characters talk about the comic and all they are going to say about it is well that sucked.