My Comics

MC Luigi · 06-20-2006, 09:03 AM

Hey, I wanted to post my comics here. If you want then post here too. First off, I'm gonna post what I would of posted in April. My friends said is was fine, some disliked it. I'm a lot better at it now. Criticize me as much as you want, this was two months ago.

Dylan · 06-20-2006, 04:58 PM

1) Inverted colors for an evil twin or likewise is a huge cliche.

2) I would actually make some ground there instead of having Mario and Luigi standing on the bottom line of the frame. It actually looks like Bowser is levitating.

3) I can't say I'm too thrilled with the fight effects, like some of the fire effects (flames, fireballs, etc.) or Luigi's tornado punch. I'm really not too thrilled about the ashes-and-hat joke or the ashes-and-eyes joke at the end either.

4) Speech bubbles would be nice to identify who's speaking first. Plus, some of Mario's text was a little hard to read.

Needs a little work, but other than that, I like those sprites. Keep workin' on it.

-Dylan

MC Luigi · 06-20-2006, 05:11 PM

/\ I got lazy with the fireballs, which I have but didn't use. Anyway, I noticed almost all who liked it liked the last two jokes. "The Mario and Fastfood" joke, and the "Rappers" I believed were funny.

EDIT- My next comic is tommorow.

MC Luigi · 06-21-2006, 09:41 PM

Here's my next comic, the "Minus World Short".

MC Luigi · 06-22-2006, 08:36 PM

Here's my newest 1 frame comic, "Imposters?".

Dylan · 06-24-2006, 11:55 AM

Not too bad. While this may not be a big deal in the last one you posted, but the Minus World comic could've been a little better with some text bubbles. Also, it's hard to tell who's speaking first in that last panel. Try reorganizing the text a little bit.

One more hint: try not to leave a panel blank like that. Instead, try to think of a further continuation of the story (A good continuation.).

-Dylan

Marioroxmysox · 06-27-2006, 09:41 PM

cool,but I can't post mine yet,i'm new and under 15 posts,and why can't i see your comics!it's weird!i am the only one that can't!

Crazybirdanimations · 06-29-2006, 12:49 AM

Good comics.

Marioroxmysox · 06-29-2006, 06:23 PM

never mind!

MC Luigi · 07-10-2006, 01:53 PM

Listen up. I edited the SMW Luigi and SMB Luigi sprites, but the Mario sprites of both comics belong to Toni and NO Body of MFGG.net, so I must credit them. Also, in the first comic, I used Toni's sprites as well. I must credit him for that too. The background of "Imposters?" is made by Black Squirrel of MFGG. Credit is given to him.

MC Luigi · 07-11-2006, 08:03 PM

You wanna know who would win in a fight between the Mario Bros and the Links? Let's see!

I put a lot of effort into this, though it looks like nothing much I spent a long time editing and stuff like that. But I'm still open for bad comments as well as good ones.

MC Luigi · 07-12-2006, 03:51 PM

Here's my next one, the Ghost House Short. I find it funny, especially the end.

MC Luigi · 07-14-2006, 08:22 PM

In case anyone missed it, I said anybody else can post Mario- related comics here. And Dylan, you're a big critic, and I'd like to see one of your comics.

Dylan · 07-14-2006, 10:48 PM

You know, they didn't make me mod of this forum for no reason.

-Dylan

**Loot** · 07-15-2006, 11:10 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Super Luigi 128

In case anyone missed it, I said anybody else can post Mario- related comics here. And Dylan, you're a big critic, and I'd like to see one of your comics.

His comics are a lot better than your steaming pile of crap.

MC Luigi · 07-15-2006, 11:13 PM

^ I know his are better, he's the mod. But I want to see one of them! And "steaming pile of crap"? I have recieved almost nothing but compliments on my comics.

Dylan · 07-16-2006, 12:17 PM

I know this sounds like a copout, but a while back I wiped out my computer thinking I could get my comics back from Ripway anytime I wanted. Well, that was a great plan until Ripway revoked my account for lack of use. All I have left is this:

Not very good, but whatever. I might start making some more actual comics, though, if I get time.

-Dylan

MC Luigi · 07-17-2006, 01:06 PM

Sorry, Dylan, but it isn't good at all. I really don't get it.

Mushi · 07-17-2006, 03:29 PM

I still can't see your comic Superluigi128.

Bandit · 07-18-2006, 05:09 AM

The "ash" effects you used for Mario, Link, and Bowser were REALLY poorly done. The pile of ash was bigger then the person it used to be.

The rap joke was ridiculously stupid. The Fastfood joke is not original. I've seen it done millions of times on TV, and even in video games. The same can be said about the Hair joke.

I really liked the sprites used in the "Minus World" comic. You should've sticked with those. SMW sprites are over-used in comics and flash movies.

06-20-2006, 09:03 AM	#1
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 15 Times in 15 Posts	My Comics Hey, I wanted to post my comics here. If you want then post here too. First off, I'm gonna post what I would of posted in April. My friends said is was fine, some disliked it. I'm a lot better at it now. Criticize me as much as you want, this was two months ago. Last edited by MC Luigi; 07-12-2006 at 03:49 PM.

06-21-2006, 09:41 PM	#4
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 15 Times in 15 Posts	Minus World Short Here's my next comic, the "Minus World Short". Last edited by MC Luigi; 06-21-2006 at 09:46 PM.

06-22-2006, 08:36 PM	#5
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 15 Times in 15 Posts	Imposters? Here's my newest 1 frame comic, "Imposters?".

07-11-2006, 08:03 PM	#11
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 15 Times in 15 Posts	OMG!!!NEW COMIC!!! You wanna know who would win in a fight between the Mario Bros and the Links? Let's see! I put a lot of effort into this, though it looks like nothing much I spent a long time editing and stuff like that. But I'm still open for bad comments as well as good ones.

06-20-2006, 04:58 PM	#2
Dylan Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Teenage Wasteland Gender: Posts: 7,790 Thanks: 1,632 Thanked 1,816 Times in 773 Posts	1) Inverted colors for an evil twin or likewise is a huge cliche. 2) I would actually make some ground there instead of having Mario and Luigi standing on the bottom line of the frame. It actually looks like Bowser is levitating. 3) I can't say I'm too thrilled with the fight effects, like some of the fire effects (flames, fireballs, etc.) or Luigi's tornado punch. I'm really not too thrilled about the ashes-and-hat joke or the ashes-and-eyes joke at the end either. 4) Speech bubbles would be nice to identify who's speaking first. Plus, some of Mario's text was a little hard to read. Needs a little work, but other than that, I like those sprites. Keep workin' on it. -Dylan

06-20-2006, 05:11 PM	#3
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 15 Times in 15 Posts	/\ I got lazy with the fireballs, which I have but didn't use. Anyway, I noticed almost all who liked it liked the last two jokes. "The Mario and Fastfood" joke, and the "Rappers" I believed were funny. EDIT- My next comic is tommorow.

06-24-2006, 11:55 AM	#6
Dylan Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Teenage Wasteland Gender: Posts: 7,790 Thanks: 1,632 Thanked 1,816 Times in 773 Posts	Not too bad. While this may not be a big deal in the last one you posted, but the Minus World comic could've been a little better with some text bubbles. Also, it's hard to tell who's speaking first in that last panel. Try reorganizing the text a little bit. One more hint: try not to leave a panel blank like that. Instead, try to think of a further continuation of the story (A good continuation.). -Dylan

06-27-2006, 09:41 PM	#7
Marioroxmysox Newbie Join Date: Jun 2006 Gender: Posts: 18 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	cool,but I can't post mine yet,i'm new and under 15 posts,and why can't i see your comics!it's weird!i am the only one that can't!

06-29-2006, 12:49 AM	#8
Crazybirdanimations Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: California Gender: Posts: 4,912 Thanks: 237 Thanked 222 Times in 175 Posts	Good comics.

06-29-2006, 06:23 PM	#9
Marioroxmysox Newbie Join Date: Jun 2006 Gender: Posts: 18 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	never mind!

07-10-2006, 01:53 PM	#10
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 15 Times in 15 Posts	Listen up. I edited the SMW Luigi and SMB Luigi sprites, but the Mario sprites of both comics belong to Toni and NO Body of MFGG.net, so I must credit them. Also, in the first comic, I used Toni's sprites as well. I must credit him for that too. The background of "Imposters?" is made by Black Squirrel of MFGG. Credit is given to him.

07-12-2006, 03:51 PM	#12
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 15 Times in 15 Posts	Here's my next one, the Ghost House Short. I find it funny, especially the end.

07-14-2006, 08:22 PM	#13
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 15 Times in 15 Posts	In case anyone missed it, I said anybody else can post Mario- related comics here. And Dylan, you're a big critic, and I'd like to see one of your comics.

07-14-2006, 10:48 PM	#14
Dylan Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Teenage Wasteland Gender: Posts: 7,790 Thanks: 1,632 Thanked 1,816 Times in 773 Posts	You know, they didn't make me mod of this forum for no reason. -Dylan

07-15-2006, 11:13 PM	#16
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 15 Times in 15 Posts	^ I know his are better, he's the mod. But I want to see one of them! And "steaming pile of crap"? I have recieved almost nothing but compliments on my comics.

07-16-2006, 12:17 PM	#17
Dylan Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Teenage Wasteland Gender: Posts: 7,790 Thanks: 1,632 Thanked 1,816 Times in 773 Posts	I know this sounds like a copout, but a while back I wiped out my computer thinking I could get my comics back from Ripway anytime I wanted. Well, that was a great plan until Ripway revoked my account for lack of use. All I have left is this: Not very good, but whatever. I might start making some more actual comics, though, if I get time. -Dylan

07-17-2006, 01:06 PM	#18
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 15 Times in 15 Posts	Sorry, Dylan, but it isn't good at all. I really don't get it.

07-17-2006, 03:29 PM	#19
Mushi Derp Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Looking at you. I can read your mind. Gender: Posts: 6,982 Thanks: 179 Thanked 351 Times in 271 Posts	I still can't see your comic Superluigi128.

07-18-2006, 05:09 AM	#20
Bandit Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: Your Pants Gender: Posts: 3,685 Thanks: 184 Thanked 165 Times in 91 Posts	The "ash" effects you used for Mario, Link, and Bowser were REALLY poorly done. The pile of ash was bigger then the person it used to be. The rap joke was ridiculously stupid. The Fastfood joke is not original. I've seen it done millions of times on TV, and even in video games. The same can be said about the Hair joke. I really liked the sprites used in the "Minus World" comic. You should've sticked with those. SMW sprites are over-used in comics and flash movies.