The official Stuper Mario Comix

Seeking Attention · 07-19-2006, 06:09 PM

I have just made my first comic to post and its at http://h1.ripway.com/bi55sm55/Stupermario1.GIF
Cut me some slack if its not to your liking its my first comic. Its called Stuper Mario Bros. not super stuper!

hello? Any comments?

Please RATE my comic PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!

I would also like to give credit to No Body(at www.mfgg.com) most of the sprites I used he made.

***Ace Mercury*** · 07-19-2006, 09:53 PM

Perhaps you haven't learned some lessons from this thread: do not double post and do not expect replys within an hour. This board is not as active as the others.

Anyways, I'll give you a short review. Please don't be discouraged; these are all things you can improve upon:

The flow is terrible. Where does Mario go in the third panel? Which order do you read the text? (the first panel all muddles together)
The punchline is lacking. What is it, Luigi wants to buy women's clothes, but then Bowser buys them instead?
There are no backgrounds (although you make a half-hearted attempt with yellow clouds in the first panel). Is that 'the mall' in the fourth panel? Why is there only one block in a sea of blank?
The sprites are cut together poorly. The mushroom platform is inconsistent, the water is missing is places, and you don't even put in a sprite for Kamek. There are sprite artifacts, stray pixels, and GIF dithering.
The font, Arial, screams amateur. There is a grammar mistake in the second panel. Also, there is no need for eighteen exclaimation marks.

As with all things, comicking takes time, effort, and practice. Keep making comics and put an honest effort to improve.

Seeking Attention · 07-20-2006, 08:11 AM

At least somebody rated the episode and ya I gonna try to improve but the backgrounds wont always be the greatest why? Because of the stupid white box problem but ive learned to sorda fix that!

***Ace Mercury*** · 07-20-2006, 08:30 AM

I'm of the school that a good artist never blames his/her tools. Learn how to create what you envision, don't make compromises based on lack of knowledge.

Seeking Attention · 07-20-2006, 08:53 AM

Riiiiiiiiiiiight....

DR.Death · 07-20-2006, 09:00 AM

well i think its hella tight for a first atempt

Seeking Attention · 07-20-2006, 09:30 AM

does that mean good or bad?

Seeking Attention · 07-20-2006, 12:16 PM

Hello and episode 2 is in! Im trying to improve on the comic,so rate the comic,leave any comments behind thank you!

Seeking Attention · 07-20-2006, 12:18 PM

whoops i forgot to post a link here you go http://h1.ripway.com/bi55sm55/stupermario2.GIF

MC Luigi · 07-20-2006, 12:45 PM

It's okay, but why are they so small and hard to see and read?

Seeking Attention · 07-20-2006, 01:43 PM

i dont no i why i find pretty easy to read but ill Try to make them bigger and better!

Seeking Attention · 07-20-2006, 04:11 PM

Episode 3 or part 2 of episode 2 is here! I didint work on the humour but I threw in 1 gory part so heres the link!http://h1.ripway.com/bi55sm55/stupermario3.GIF

Seeking Attention · 07-20-2006, 05:47 PM

Hello any comments?

Seeking Attention · 07-20-2006, 06:32 PM

Hi im gonna take a break from Stuper Mario Bros. to work on my other comics and yes im sorry to Ace Mercury for triple posting(so dont complain).

Seeking Attention · 07-20-2006, 07:56 PM

Alright someone make a comment please!!!!!!!!!

***Ace Mercury*** · 07-20-2006, 08:29 PM

-1, Troll

Seeking Attention · 07-20-2006, 08:34 PM

Why did you call me a troll?

***Ace Mercury*** · 07-20-2006, 08:42 PM

Okay, on second thought, I'm going to just assume you're not annoying on purpose with incessant posting.

Luigiman7 · 07-20-2006, 08:54 PM

Seeking Attention · 07-20-2006, 09:04 PM

Um ok then...

07-19-2006, 06:09 PM	#1
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	I have just made my first comic to post and its at http://h1.ripway.com/bi55sm55/Stupermario1.GIF Cut me some slack if its not to your liking its my first comic. Its called Stuper Mario Bros. not super stuper! hello? Any comments? Please RATE my comic PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!! I would also like to give credit to No Body(at www.mfgg.com) most of the sprites I used he made. Last edited by Seeking Attention; 07-22-2006 at 10:38 AM. Reason: Quit triple-posting, you.

07-19-2006, 09:53 PM	#2
*Ace Mercury* Marshmallow Knight ☆ Supermod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Southern Ontario Gender: Posts: 23,275 Thanks: 568 Thanked 3,297 Times in 1,582 Posts Blog Entries: 1	Perhaps you haven't learned some lessons from this thread: do not double post and do not expect replys within an hour. This board is not as active as the others. Anyways, I'll give you a short review. Please don't be discouraged; these are all things you can improve upon: The flow is terrible. Where does Mario go in the third panel? Which order do you read the text? (the first panel all muddles together) The punchline is lacking. What is it, Luigi wants to buy women's clothes, but then Bowser buys them instead? There are no backgrounds (although you make a half-hearted attempt with yellow clouds in the first panel). Is that 'the mall' in the fourth panel? Why is there only one block in a sea of blank? The sprites are cut together poorly. The mushroom platform is inconsistent, the water is missing is places, and you don't even put in a sprite for Kamek. There are sprite artifacts, stray pixels, and GIF dithering. The font, Arial, screams amateur. There is a grammar mistake in the second panel. Also, there is no need for eighteen exclaimation marks. As with all things, comicking takes time, effort, and practice. Keep making comics and put an honest effort to improve.

07-20-2006, 12:16 PM	#8
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	Episode2 the x-naut menace(or something like that) Hello and episode 2 is in! Im trying to improve on the comic,so rate the comic,leave any comments behind thank you!

07-20-2006, 04:11 PM	#12
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	The bros make their escape! Episode 3 or part 2 of episode 2 is here! I didint work on the humour but I threw in 1 gory part so heres the link!http://h1.ripway.com/bi55sm55/stupermario3.GIF

07-20-2006, 06:32 PM	#14
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	Game Over or is it... Hi im gonna take a break from Stuper Mario Bros. to work on my other comics and yes im sorry to Ace Mercury for triple posting(so dont complain).

07-20-2006, 08:11 AM	#3
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	At least somebody rated the episode and ya I gonna try to improve but the backgrounds wont always be the greatest why? Because of the stupid white box problem but ive learned to sorda fix that!

07-20-2006, 08:30 AM	#4
*Ace Mercury* Marshmallow Knight ☆ Supermod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Southern Ontario Gender: Posts: 23,275 Thanks: 568 Thanked 3,297 Times in 1,582 Posts Blog Entries: 1	I'm of the school that a good artist never blames his/her tools. Learn how to create what you envision, don't make compromises based on lack of knowledge.

07-20-2006, 08:53 AM	#5
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	Riiiiiiiiiiiight....

07-20-2006, 09:00 AM	#6
DR.Death Junior Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: under your bed Gender: Posts: 268 Thanks: 1 Thanked 5 Times in 3 Posts	well i think its hella tight for a first atempt

07-20-2006, 09:30 AM	#7
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	does that mean good or bad?

07-20-2006, 12:18 PM	#9
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	whoops i forgot to post a link here you go http://h1.ripway.com/bi55sm55/stupermario2.GIF

07-20-2006, 12:45 PM	#10
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 15 Times in 15 Posts	It's okay, but why are they so small and hard to see and read?

07-20-2006, 01:43 PM	#11
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	i dont no i why i find pretty easy to read but ill Try to make them bigger and better!

07-20-2006, 05:47 PM	#13
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	Hello any comments?

07-20-2006, 07:56 PM	#15
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	Alright someone make a comment please!!!!!!!!!

07-20-2006, 08:29 PM	#16
*Ace Mercury* Marshmallow Knight ☆ Supermod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Southern Ontario Gender: Posts: 23,275 Thanks: 568 Thanked 3,297 Times in 1,582 Posts Blog Entries: 1	-1, Troll

07-20-2006, 08:34 PM	#17
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	Why did you call me a troll? Last edited by Seeking Attention; 07-23-2006 at 08:45 PM.

07-20-2006, 08:42 PM	#18
*Ace Mercury* Marshmallow Knight ☆ Supermod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Southern Ontario Gender: Posts: 23,275 Thanks: 568 Thanked 3,297 Times in 1,582 Posts Blog Entries: 1	Okay, on second thought, I'm going to just assume you're not annoying on purpose with incessant posting.

07-20-2006, 08:54 PM	#19
Luigiman7 ヽ(◔ ◡ ◔)ノ.･ﾟ*｡･+☆ Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: ~)´◡｀(~ Gender: Posts: 17,605 Thanks: 1,134 Thanked 1,012 Times in 713 Posts Blog Entries: 8	...

07-20-2006, 09:04 PM	#20
Seeking Attention Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	Um ok then...