The adventures of Ryan Spark

Spritedude · 10-09-2006, 03:00 AM

Whew! finally done! Well, here's my first drawn comic serires. I'll post a new one once or twice a week. Critique as much as you want.

Crazybirdanimations · 10-09-2006, 03:42 AM

I liked the panel where the guy with the bloody arm said: "Why cant I beat you?!" That's the only good part.

MC Luigi · 10-09-2006, 10:42 AM

Mikhail Gorbachev · 10-09-2006, 11:57 AM

It's not bad.
The shading on the blade of the sword could use work.
I'd criticize the drawing but I suck at drawing and would have no idea what I'm talking about.
The pacing also seemed to be a little awkward, but I can't put my finger on it.

Seeking Attention is passe · 10-09-2006, 12:28 PM

It didnt have much of a storyline.

The Eye In The Sky · 10-09-2006, 03:56 PM

^And since when where an expert on story lines?

Anyhoo, nice comic. I wish I could refine my SUN SOLDIERS comic in such a way...

Frumie · 10-09-2006, 07:11 PM

Am I the only person that knows that the Bloody-Armed One is actually a woman?

Mikhail Gorbachev · 10-09-2006, 07:12 PM

^No, I could tell, too.

Spritedude · 10-09-2006, 07:24 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Count Chocula

Am I the only person that knows that the Bloody-Armed One is actually a woman?

That's a guy.

Mikhail Gorbachev · 10-09-2006, 07:26 PM

Er, sorry.

Rainbow Dash · 10-09-2006, 07:40 PM

Boo, comic. Hooray beer!

Mikhail Gorbachev · 10-09-2006, 07:42 PM

Heh, I noticed the edit.

Frumie · 10-09-2006, 08:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Spritedude

That's a guy.

A Guy in a tube skirt?

Seeking Attention is passe · 10-09-2006, 08:45 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by MC Mushi Mo

^And since when where an expert on story lines?

Anyhoo, nice comic. I wish I could refine my SUN SOLDIERS comic in such a way...

There wasnt a storyline at all just too guys fighting thats about it.

Mikhail Gorbachev · 10-09-2006, 08:48 PM

It's the first comic.
It's very, very common for stories (i.e. every single bestselling novel ever) to begin with a fight, battle, murder, etc.
Exposition and explanation of the events comes later.

Dylan · 10-10-2006, 12:08 AM

The only problem I had was with the sweat. For some reason, it looked a little awkward on the guy fighting with the sword. That could be just me, though. Other than that, not bad. Keep up the good work.

-Dylan

REDJ · 10-17-2006, 05:42 PM

I will devour souls.

Spritedude · 10-17-2006, 11:47 PM

Thanks for the comments guys. Here's the next comic.

Link 456 · 11-11-2006, 12:41 AM

Nice! I can't wait for the next one.

Rainbow Dash · 11-11-2006, 12:44 AM

NO. DO. NOT. BUMP. OLD. TOPICS.

10-09-2006, 03:00 AM	#1
Spritedude Calibrating... Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: The Centennial State Gender: Posts: 1,333 Thanks: 49 Thanked 66 Times in 39 Posts	The adventures of Ryan Spark Whew! finally done! Well, here's my first drawn comic serires. I'll post a new one once or twice a week. Critique as much as you want. Last edited by Spritedude; 10-09-2006 at 07:31 PM.

10-09-2006, 10:42 AM	#3
MC Luigi Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In YO FACE Gender: Posts: 1,033 Thanks: 41 Thanked 15 Times in 15 Posts	Last edited by MC Luigi; 10-09-2006 at 10:51 AM.

10-17-2006, 11:47 PM	#18
Spritedude Calibrating... Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: The Centennial State Gender: Posts: 1,333 Thanks: 49 Thanked 66 Times in 39 Posts	Thanks for the comments guys. Here's the next comic. Last edited by Spritedude; 10-17-2006 at 11:55 PM.

10-09-2006, 03:42 AM	#2
Crazybirdanimations Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: California Gender: Posts: 4,912 Thanks: 237 Thanked 222 Times in 175 Posts	I liked the panel where the guy with the bloody arm said: "Why cant I beat you?!" That's the only good part.

10-09-2006, 11:57 AM	#4
Mikhail Gorbachev Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2004 Gender: Posts: 9,659 Thanks: 31 Thanked 89 Times in 71 Posts	It's not bad. The shading on the blade of the sword could use work. I'd criticize the drawing but I suck at drawing and would have no idea what I'm talking about. The pacing also seemed to be a little awkward, but I can't put my finger on it.

10-09-2006, 12:28 PM	#5
Seeking Attention is passe Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Gender: Posts: 0 Thanks: 489 Thanked 185 Times in 153 Posts	It didnt have much of a storyline.

10-09-2006, 03:56 PM	#6
The Eye In The Sky Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Looking at you. I can read your mind. Gender: Posts: 6,951 Thanks: 179 Thanked 348 Times in 269 Posts	^And since when where an expert on story lines? Anyhoo, nice comic. I wish I could refine my SUN SOLDIERS comic in such a way...

10-09-2006, 07:11 PM	#7
Frumie Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Planet X Gender: Posts: 3,926 Thanks: 310 Thanked 221 Times in 147 Posts	Am I the only person that knows that the Bloody-Armed One is actually a woman?

10-09-2006, 07:12 PM	#8
Mikhail Gorbachev Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2004 Gender: Posts: 9,659 Thanks: 31 Thanked 89 Times in 71 Posts	^No, I could tell, too.

10-09-2006, 07:26 PM	#10
Mikhail Gorbachev Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2004 Gender: Posts: 9,659 Thanks: 31 Thanked 89 Times in 71 Posts	Er, sorry.

10-09-2006, 07:40 PM	#11
Rainbow Dash been dreamin', i've been waitin' Join Date: Jan 2001 Gender: Posts: 23,790 Thanks: 169 Thanked 1,120 Times in 677 Posts	Boo, comic. Hooray beer!

10-09-2006, 07:42 PM	#12
Mikhail Gorbachev Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2004 Gender: Posts: 9,659 Thanks: 31 Thanked 89 Times in 71 Posts	Heh, I noticed the edit.

10-09-2006, 08:48 PM	#15
Mikhail Gorbachev Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2004 Gender: Posts: 9,659 Thanks: 31 Thanked 89 Times in 71 Posts	It's the first comic. It's very, very common for stories (i.e. every single bestselling novel ever) to begin with a fight, battle, murder, etc. Exposition and explanation of the events comes later.

10-10-2006, 12:08 AM	#16
Dylan Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Teenage Wasteland Gender: Posts: 7,790 Thanks: 1,632 Thanked 1,816 Times in 773 Posts	The only problem I had was with the sweat. For some reason, it looked a little awkward on the guy fighting with the sword. That could be just me, though. Other than that, not bad. Keep up the good work. -Dylan

10-17-2006, 05:42 PM	#17
REDJ Junior Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Gender: Posts: 144 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	I will devour souls.

11-11-2006, 12:41 AM	#19
Link 456 Member Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: The Land of Love Gender: Posts: 2,298 Thanks: 86 Thanked 74 Times in 58 Posts Blog Entries: 1	Nice! I can't wait for the next one.

11-11-2006, 12:44 AM	#20
Rainbow Dash been dreamin', i've been waitin' Join Date: Jan 2001 Gender: Posts: 23,790 Thanks: 169 Thanked 1,120 Times in 677 Posts	NO. DO. NOT. BUMP. OLD. TOPICS.