Im Back With Advengence

BLUEDASH2 · 02-25-2007, 12:34 PM

my new comics line (advencence is advance 4 game boy advance and vengence but together)

**Valigarmander** · 02-25-2007, 12:35 PM

Whoa, deja vu.

Panfan · 02-25-2007, 12:37 PM

Did you pay attention to your last topic?

BLUEDASH2 · 02-25-2007, 01:02 PM

i gave u a better vocab structure

heres a preview ( i ll have better artwork)

Panfan · 02-25-2007, 02:19 PM

Wow, that is worse than my comic.

BLUEDASH2 · 02-25-2007, 02:26 PM

i mde it quickly is was at school

Panfan · 02-25-2007, 03:12 PM

You shouldn't make your comics quickly. Take your time on writing the comic first. Then, once you have it all written out, use the spell check. Also, please get a storyline. A random battle is not a storyline. You must lead up to why they are fighting. Otherwise it's just random fighting.

In the comic, you should've just had three lines where Protoman was, and have the full Protoman sprite behind Mega Man.

That sprite doesn't look like Protoman at all. It just looks like a MM recolor. There are multiple sprite sites like The Spriter's Resource to help you.

Good Night, and have a pleasant tomorrow.

BLUEDASH2 · 02-25-2007, 03:20 PM

i klnow thats were im getting my new comic sprites from in stead of megaman just being the only one it will be a mix of mario sonic dbz and megaman

***Ace Mercury*** · 02-25-2007, 03:26 PM

Well, it's a... start.

BLUEDASH2 · 02-25-2007, 03:27 PM

sorry im takiing so long w/ my posts im working on my other series right now

BLUEDASH2 · 02-25-2007, 05:10 PM

okay im gonna show u what i got

in the third panel mario says then why are we waiting lets a play

Dylan · 02-26-2007, 12:32 AM

-Dylan

**Valigarmander** · 02-26-2007, 12:51 AM

Okay, your comicking really needs some work. The sprites are sloppy, there's MSPaint scribbles everywhere, the text is small and scrunched together. My suggestion is to take your time. The more you put into your comic, the more people will get out of it.

Also, try to make your panels more than 10x10 pixels in size.

BLUEDASH2 · 02-26-2007, 06:19 PM

i know but this is just part as a privew

LinkManDX · 02-26-2007, 08:15 PM

4 blank panels?

BLUEDASH2 · 02-26-2007, 09:35 PM

im not done with the page the next panel will start the fight

BLUEDASH2 · 03-11-2007, 08:52 PM

sorry i havent made any new posts i dont have a mouse so i cant make my comix got any ideas i could give out a storyline but that be tmi

Seeking Attention · 03-11-2007, 09:07 PM

Totally Kennerson · 03-11-2007, 09:27 PM

*slowly hides the topic under a rug*

BLUEDASH2 · 03-12-2007, 07:41 PM

heres the page

02-25-2007, 12:34 PM	#1
BLUEDASH2 Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2006 Gender: Posts: 186 Thanks: 2 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Im Back With Advengence my new comics line (advencence is advance 4 game boy advance and vengence but together)

02-25-2007, 01:02 PM	#4
BLUEDASH2 Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2006 Gender: Posts: 186 Thanks: 2 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	i gave u a better vocab structure heres a preview ( i ll have better artwork) Last edited by BLUEDASH2; 02-25-2007 at 01:58 PM.

02-25-2007, 02:26 PM	#6
BLUEDASH2 Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2006 Gender: Posts: 186 Thanks: 2 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	i mde it quickly is was at school Last edited by BLUEDASH2; 02-25-2007 at 02:36 PM.

02-25-2007, 12:35 PM	#2
Valigarmander The Bee's Knees Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: The land of rain and trees (Oregon) Gender: Posts: 29,755 Thanks: 1,649 Thanked 5,700 Times in 2,580 Posts Blog Entries: 20	Whoa, deja vu.

02-25-2007, 12:37 PM	#3
Panfan AND HE PRAYS Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Grayskull Gender: Posts: 18,804 Thanks: 1,405 Thanked 2,247 Times in 1,337 Posts Blog Entries: 15	Did you pay attention to your last topic?

02-25-2007, 02:19 PM	#5
Panfan AND HE PRAYS Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Grayskull Gender: Posts: 18,804 Thanks: 1,405 Thanked 2,247 Times in 1,337 Posts Blog Entries: 15	Wow, that is worse than my comic.

02-25-2007, 03:12 PM	#7
Panfan AND HE PRAYS Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Grayskull Gender: Posts: 18,804 Thanks: 1,405 Thanked 2,247 Times in 1,337 Posts Blog Entries: 15	You shouldn't make your comics quickly. Take your time on writing the comic first. Then, once you have it all written out, use the spell check. Also, please get a storyline. A random battle is not a storyline. You must lead up to why they are fighting. Otherwise it's just random fighting. In the comic, you should've just had three lines where Protoman was, and have the full Protoman sprite behind Mega Man. That sprite doesn't look like Protoman at all. It just looks like a MM recolor. There are multiple sprite sites like The Spriter's Resource to help you. Good Night, and have a pleasant tomorrow.

02-25-2007, 03:20 PM	#8
BLUEDASH2 Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2006 Gender: Posts: 186 Thanks: 2 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	i klnow thats were im getting my new comic sprites from in stead of megaman just being the only one it will be a mix of mario sonic dbz and megaman

02-25-2007, 03:26 PM	#9
*Ace Mercury* Marshmallow Knight ☆ Supermod Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Southern Ontario Gender: Posts: 23,274 Thanks: 568 Thanked 3,297 Times in 1,582 Posts Blog Entries: 1	Well, it's a... start.

02-25-2007, 03:27 PM	#10
BLUEDASH2 Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2006 Gender: Posts: 186 Thanks: 2 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	sorry im takiing so long w/ my posts im working on my other series right now

02-25-2007, 05:10 PM	#11
BLUEDASH2 Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2006 Gender: Posts: 186 Thanks: 2 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	okay im gonna show u what i got in the third panel mario says then why are we waiting lets a play

02-26-2007, 12:32 AM	#12
Dylan Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Teenage Wasteland Gender: Posts: 7,790 Thanks: 1,632 Thanked 1,816 Times in 773 Posts	-Dylan

02-26-2007, 12:51 AM	#13
Valigarmander The Bee's Knees Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: The land of rain and trees (Oregon) Gender: Posts: 29,755 Thanks: 1,649 Thanked 5,700 Times in 2,580 Posts Blog Entries: 20	Okay, your comicking really needs some work. The sprites are sloppy, there's MSPaint scribbles everywhere, the text is small and scrunched together. My suggestion is to take your time. The more you put into your comic, the more people will get out of it. Also, try to make your panels more than 10x10 pixels in size.

03-11-2007, 09:07 PM	#18
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02-26-2007, 06:19 PM	#14
BLUEDASH2 Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2006 Gender: Posts: 186 Thanks: 2 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	i know but this is just part as a privew

02-26-2007, 08:15 PM	#15
LinkManDX Senior Member Join Date: May 2002 Location: Because political usernames ftw Gender: Posts: 3,582 Thanks: 297 Thanked 266 Times in 156 Posts	4 blank panels?

02-26-2007, 09:35 PM	#16
BLUEDASH2 Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2006 Gender: Posts: 186 Thanks: 2 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	im not done with the page the next panel will start the fight

03-11-2007, 08:52 PM	#17
BLUEDASH2 Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2006 Gender: Posts: 186 Thanks: 2 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	sorry i havent made any new posts i dont have a mouse so i cant make my comix got any ideas i could give out a storyline but that be tmi

03-11-2007, 09:27 PM	#19
Totally Kennerson Member Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Falling down all these stairs Gender: Posts: 2,116 Thanks: 340 Thanked 406 Times in 136 Posts Blog Entries: 1	slowly hides the topic under a rug

03-12-2007, 07:41 PM	#20
BLUEDASH2 Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2006 Gender: Posts: 186 Thanks: 2 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	heres the page