Super Mario Bros./NC

1-up Salesman · 06-14-2008, 08:18 PM

This is going to be alot better than Luigi's Evil Plan. Alot of you will be pleased that I used real backgrounds.

So what do you think?

Redshirt · 06-14-2008, 08:23 PM

Tip: try and keep your frames the same size.

1-up Salesman · 06-14-2008, 08:32 PM

But what did you think?

Redshirt · 06-14-2008, 08:35 PM

The last two panels did make me laugh a little.

1-up Salesman · 06-14-2008, 08:38 PM

Then I guess I'm off to a good start. Better than Luigi's Evil Plan. I'll get started on another chapter/part/issue.

Redshirt · 06-14-2008, 08:40 PM

Take your time no need to rush.

1-up Salesman · 06-14-2008, 08:41 PM

I really enjoy making sprite comix.

Panfan · 06-14-2008, 09:34 PM

- Backgrounds don't look too hot.
- Already said, but keep panels the same size
- Get rid of that white space
- Make sure the lines that separate the panels are straight
- Text bubbles look horrible.

1-up Salesman · 06-14-2008, 09:44 PM

Panfan · 06-14-2008, 09:48 PM

Another tip: just plain red from the default palette isn't the best for blood. You should add other colors.

1-up Salesman · 06-14-2008, 09:52 PM

sigh, okay. I'm getting kind of tired of people pointing out everything that is wrong with my comix.

1-up Salesman · 06-14-2008, 11:19 PM

Dylan · 06-14-2008, 11:44 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by 1-up salesman

sigh, okay. I'm getting kind of tired of people pointing out everything that is wrong with my comix.

Then quit posting and asking people what they think. Duh.

EDIT: And everyone is right: your comics are terrible and need a lot of work. Panfan went over most of the problems, but I noticed the compression of some sprites looks absolutely terrible. What are you doing to them? Seriously.

1-up Salesman · 06-15-2008, 02:30 PM

What can I do to make them better?

Señor Luigi · 06-15-2008, 04:22 PM

Get rid of the black space around Mario.

1-up Salesman · 06-15-2008, 08:03 PM

Okay, I'll use another Mario sprite sheet. Anything else I can do to improve on it?

Panfan · 06-15-2008, 08:25 PM

Fix the things that Dylan, Mushman, and I pointed out.

1-up Salesman · 06-15-2008, 09:00 PM

Okay. Though it is better than Luigi's evil plan, right?

Dylan · 06-15-2008, 10:02 PM

Slightly better. Slightly. The background is still awful, and I'm pretty sure that's not how the Extra Move looks/works.

Luigiman7 · 06-15-2008, 10:43 PM

haha spin dash

That was the only thing that made me laugh.

06-14-2008, 08:18 PM	#1
1-up Salesman Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Letting you guys know that I'm planning on continuing Attack of the Spammers soon. Gender: Posts: 4,095 Thanks: 2,162 Thanked 250 Times in 194 Posts Blog Entries: 9	Super Mario Bros./NC This is going to be alot better than Luigi's Evil Plan. Alot of you will be pleased that I used real backgrounds. So what do you think? Last edited by 1-up Salesman; 06-14-2008 at 08:18 PM. Reason: Automerged Doublepost

06-15-2008, 09:00 PM	#18
1-up Salesman Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Letting you guys know that I'm planning on continuing Attack of the Spammers soon. Gender: Posts: 4,095 Thanks: 2,162 Thanked 250 Times in 194 Posts Blog Entries: 9	Okay. Though it is better than Luigi's evil plan, right? Last edited by 1-up Salesman; 06-15-2008 at 09:00 PM. Reason: Automerged Doublepost

06-14-2008, 08:23 PM	#2
Redshirt Wiggidy Wack Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: A place with things Gender: Posts: 16,699 Thanks: 704 Thanked 1,006 Times in 695 Posts Blog Entries: 50	Tip: try and keep your frames the same size.

06-14-2008, 08:32 PM	#3
1-up Salesman Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Letting you guys know that I'm planning on continuing Attack of the Spammers soon. Gender: Posts: 4,095 Thanks: 2,162 Thanked 250 Times in 194 Posts Blog Entries: 9	But what did you think?

06-14-2008, 08:35 PM	#4
Redshirt Wiggidy Wack Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: A place with things Gender: Posts: 16,699 Thanks: 704 Thanked 1,006 Times in 695 Posts Blog Entries: 50	The last two panels did make me laugh a little.

06-14-2008, 08:38 PM	#5
1-up Salesman Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Letting you guys know that I'm planning on continuing Attack of the Spammers soon. Gender: Posts: 4,095 Thanks: 2,162 Thanked 250 Times in 194 Posts Blog Entries: 9	Then I guess I'm off to a good start. Better than Luigi's Evil Plan. I'll get started on another chapter/part/issue.

06-14-2008, 08:40 PM	#6
Redshirt Wiggidy Wack Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: A place with things Gender: Posts: 16,699 Thanks: 704 Thanked 1,006 Times in 695 Posts Blog Entries: 50	Take your time no need to rush.

06-14-2008, 08:41 PM	#7
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06-14-2008, 09:34 PM	#8
Panfan AND HE PRAYS Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Grayskull Gender: Posts: 18,806 Thanks: 1,405 Thanked 2,251 Times in 1,339 Posts Blog Entries: 15	- Backgrounds don't look too hot. - Already said, but keep panels the same size - Get rid of that white space - Make sure the lines that separate the panels are straight - Text bubbles look horrible.

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06-14-2008, 09:48 PM	#10
Panfan AND HE PRAYS Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Grayskull Gender: Posts: 18,806 Thanks: 1,405 Thanked 2,251 Times in 1,339 Posts Blog Entries: 15	Another tip: just plain red from the default palette isn't the best for blood. You should add other colors.

06-14-2008, 09:52 PM	#11
1-up Salesman Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Letting you guys know that I'm planning on continuing Attack of the Spammers soon. Gender: Posts: 4,095 Thanks: 2,162 Thanked 250 Times in 194 Posts Blog Entries: 9	sigh, okay. I'm getting kind of tired of people pointing out everything that is wrong with my comix.

06-14-2008, 11:19 PM	#12
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06-15-2008, 02:30 PM	#14
1-up Salesman Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Letting you guys know that I'm planning on continuing Attack of the Spammers soon. Gender: Posts: 4,095 Thanks: 2,162 Thanked 250 Times in 194 Posts Blog Entries: 9	What can I do to make them better?

06-15-2008, 04:22 PM	#15
Señor Luigi Junior Member Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: In your shower Gender: Posts: 414 Thanks: 21 Thanked 24 Times in 19 Posts	Get rid of the black space around Mario.

06-15-2008, 08:03 PM	#16
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06-15-2008, 08:25 PM	#17
Panfan AND HE PRAYS Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Grayskull Gender: Posts: 18,806 Thanks: 1,405 Thanked 2,251 Times in 1,339 Posts Blog Entries: 15	Fix the things that Dylan, Mushman, and I pointed out.

06-15-2008, 10:02 PM	#19
Dylan Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Teenage Wasteland Gender: Posts: 7,790 Thanks: 1,632 Thanked 1,816 Times in 773 Posts	Slightly better. Slightly. The background is still awful, and I'm pretty sure that's not how the Extra Move looks/works.

06-15-2008, 10:43 PM	#20
Luigiman7 ヽ(◔ ◡ ◔)ノ.･ﾟ*｡･+☆ Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: ~)´◡｀(~ Gender: Posts: 17,605 Thanks: 1,134 Thanked 1,012 Times in 713 Posts Blog Entries: 8	haha spin dash That was the only thing that made me laugh.